because it's 12:30 am and i'm bored

[blaarg]

i normally don't really post here, i guess i'm paranoid about people stealing my lyrics or something, but here's a song i was working on a while ago, i still have to fine-tune a few parts of it... probably.

My World (tentative title, if you could think of anything better, please do)

Well reality contorts to personal perception
based on ideas we find possible to concieve
we go through life with no introspection
to find that who we are isn't always what we believe
we always find it possible to alter our conception
and change out surroundings to suit our needs
but sooner or later we reach the realization
that after running for so long
we don't relize the problem's gone
and continue to live in a blaze of similarity

So i'll build a wall up to surround me
a place to call home when the world is my enemy
a state of bliss and ignorence
where problems disapear through insentience

And there's a place we just can't reach
somewhere between conciousness and sleep
a place where the solutions to all our problems lie
but our concious minds throw truth into the deep
when faced with answers we don't like but can't deny

And so i built my own fortress
and locked myself solitarily inside
a stronghold against reality
when the world is closing in on me
i know where i can turn to hide
but these walls won't stand forever
and an escape lasts only so long
before becoming a prison of it's own
stuck in the middle with no defintion of right from wrong
it seems there's nothing left of the world i've always known

When black and white combine into a shade of gray
reality and fantasy are worlds away
and when two worlds collide into disaray
the road you've paved
the reality you've made
will crumble to the ground and slowly fade away

[MaybeOneDay]

i like it alot dude

[wasted]

wow, that's really good, and i think the title fits the song perfectly.

you should post more of your stuff here, i'm sure everyone would like to read more.

[blaarg]

Originally posted by wasted
wow, that's really good, and i think the title fits the song perfectly.

you should post more of your stuff here, i'm sure everyone would like to read more.
thanks, and i might, but i never write songs on my computer, everything i do is on loose leaf somewhere in my house, so when i feel like retyping stuff i already wrote, or get too tired to do anything else, i guess i will.

[blaarg]

don't like it? kiss my rump
just for a minute lets all do the bump

(if anyone knows where that's from, you're my new hero)

anyway... BUMP

[The Nephilm]

blaarg-

it's good, but don't turn into Greg Graffin on me. sometimes he puts big words into his songs when they just aren't needed. i know your only 15 and want to sound smarter than the average 30 year old, but sometimes simple words will suffice.

[Alex Djaferis]

Originally posted by The Nephilm
blaarg-

it's good, but don't turn into Greg Graffin on me. sometimes he puts big words into his songs when they just aren't needed. i know your only 15 and want to sound smarter than the average 30 year old, but sometimes simple words will suffice.

wow, a more or less nice answer!!

Blaarg i like it alot :) but yeah does sound like graffin ...still real good tho.

[blaarg]

Originally posted by The Nephilm
blaarg-

it's good, but don't turn into Greg Graffin on me. sometimes he puts big words into his songs when they just aren't needed. i know your only 15 and want to sound smarter than the average 30 year old, but sometimes simple words will suffice.
thanks, and i know, i usually don't use too many big words, they just kinda came out in this song

[proeuthanasia]

i like it. especially "And so i built my own fortress
and locked myself solitarily inside
a stronghold against reality
when the world is closing in on me
i know where i can turn to hide
but these walls won't stand forever
and an escape lasts only so long
before becoming a prison of it's own". but, like others have said, you use 'big words' unnecessarily. don't use them just so your song rhymes. i find that lyrics are often better when they don't rhyme, because they are more heartfelt as they are written and can be sung (ahem...if 'sung' is a word...) with more feeling as they are.....well....sung.












goddamnit. someone get me a dictionary.