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countthestars4
07/24/03, 05:09 PM
hey i recently just wrote some stuff down and its the first time ive ever written lyrics...i was just wondering what everyone's opinion was or any suggestions:

nothing ever works out for me in
this life
is so overrated
please tell me: whats the point?
i live to be shot down then just to die again
but thats just how it goes, i suppose
the right what out? no one knows
forever and add eternity
the thought of that scares me
but im not scared to die
i fear life itself
what an ongoing battle of tears
theyll fall forever wont they


words on the paper, this pen in my hand
i keep getting farther from all solid land
im falling down quickly but this time i know
that no one is waiting to catch me below
and it seems as if everythings fading away
everythings worthless, its all so cliche
all these distractions are growing so old
and my future has nothing new left to unfold
im dying here silently, you still wouldnt see
if i was bleeding and begging "just please set me free"
people are shallow and cant feel my pain
they wander around searching only to gain
death's so evasive but life's buring me out
this leaves me with only myself to doubt


laugh
i wish i knew
you dont know
this is selfish isnt it
i am nothing though
a void with nothing to fill it
all the details, memories, tears
all my greatest fears
i am hiding from myslef
no exits anywhere near
ill just stay in the dark here
night
thats when it hits me hardest
alone with myself
people shouldnt be too scared to think
but im on the brink of death
too selfish and weak
others can take it, why cant i?
all i wnat is to die
nothing matters anymore

Alex Djaferis
07/25/03, 02:29 AM
i like it alot apart from the first 4 lines.