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Scoobydumb56
07/24/03, 08:10 PM
please give me your comments i would like to recieve some criticisim, whether it be good or bad



we could go away
to a better place
anywhere
the only rule to follow is love

dont abide
to anything someone says
i wont eclipse your dreams
as long as your in mine

be with me
and i'll be with
you
are my friend

stay with me
and we can go to
the unconcious world
laying together
thats where we'll be

don't leave my side
and i'll follow the rule

punklet2101
07/27/03, 11:09 PM
lovely. :)