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[TheJuice31]

Inner Me

What can I do to hault these evil screams/
My endless slumber, I see with repeated dreams/
The moment I recall the tragic night/
Corrupted in the ending of this normal life/

A sidewinder staircase, sanity vanished without a trace/
Cylindrical spectrum, this everlasting vision is blackened/

I've got sickle cell compassion/
Your blood soothes the heart's attraction/
Suicidal passion/
My grip on reality has lost all it's traction/

My conscience is my ray of hope/
My conscience is my ray of hope/

A sidewinder staircase, sanity vanished without a trace/
Cylindrical spectrum, this everlasting vision is blackened/

Some question the mind in it's actuality/
I don't blame my conscience, just my personality/
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Just Pissed Off

Calling the tragic, speaketh to savage/
You think these thoughts are f**kin' insane/
Merciful past time, built with a flat spine/
So how the f**k am I alive/
I observe all my ups and my downs/
Normally comfort them with disturbing frowns/
Just a minute til my hell is complete/
Take my face, kiss the hot concrete/
This f**ked up thing you call life is obsolete/
What is this mood that you like to call shame/
It's become second nature but I can't complain/
What is this blind hope I'll never obtain/
Anymore second thoughts only rot my brain/
F**k you all, I am not insane/
You're only held responsible as my blame/
I just wanna cover up to hide from this world/
Find that happy place where you're all absurd/

[TheJuice31]

ne1?

[tothereflection]

it's good. i like the words you use, and it tells an awesome story. you have talent..keep writing. it's a bit short...but it's good so i don't think that affects the quality of the song in the least.