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MaybeOneDay
07/25/03, 05:25 AM
" Opening Up The Inside Voices "

The colour of your eyes
Is the way I'd paint my future
If only this tragic ending
To the last potential kiss
Could describe the flutter of wings
And the hollow sound of veins
Rushing from your head to your toes

Last long the brilliant star
That shines inside my heart
Falls and makes the next
Convention of the surroundings
Whilst the uproar causes
Yet another false alarm
Into the tide of the ocean air

Fall to your knees
From the sky above
Soar above the trees
With your destined glove
That could slap the hands of time
And end this any day now

The sound from your temple
Makes the blood run smoothly
As the men inside us
Work around the clock to make life pleasent
When all one can conclude
Is the greatest fall
He or she knows they will not survive

The knife gets pulled from the eve
Rolls over the vast hills
Into our hell which we've created
Took longer than 7 days
But instead, our lives
Which we've sent a stabbing
Pain sears across your throbbing chest

Fall to your knees
From the sky above
Soar above the trees
With your destined glove
That could slap the hands of time
And end this any day now

But when will all of this be over ?

Think back to when you stepped inside that empty classroom
From that day
You knew this would some day become your destiny
To live
To die
To make a difference upon us and change our lives forever
To end this all

Fall to your knees
From the sky above
Soar above the trees
With your destined glove
That could slap the hands of time
And end this any day now

BuriedAlive
07/25/03, 05:29 AM
its one of the better love songs i have read. try to expand and write about something different. like all the songs you write are love songs. are you going through a bad time or something?

"That could slap the hands of time", try to find a different word than slap. it makes it sound kinda rushed.

MaybeOneDay
07/25/03, 06:48 AM
alot of the songs i write aren't personal to me at all. they're just about feelings in general which I know many people are experiencing. by the way, i wrote this song in 3 minutes, theres not even a tune to it. its just an experiment, i dont plan to use it for anything.

na, not going through any bad time at all. i just like to write. and not all the songs ive written are love songs. i wrote one called The Anthem of Your Underground about a special place someone never wants to leave. and another called Early Morning which is also not a love song. and finally one more called Wait It Out. but yes, theres about 3 other love longs, which incorporate feelings of guilt, love, anger, and pain.

blaarg
07/25/03, 07:55 AM
wow, that's actually very good, the lyrics are great, but the title doesn't ring to well.

MaybeOneDay
07/25/03, 09:46 AM
yeah like i said, the title and lyrics were made up in a matter of less than 5 minutes. its nothing im keeping, anyone here can gladly take it if they'd like. dont see why anyone would though....but thanks joe.

blaarg
07/25/03, 03:52 PM
Originally posted by The Notion
yeah like i said, the title and lyrics were made up in a matter of less than 5 minutes. its nothing im keeping, anyone here can gladly take it if they'd like. dont see why anyone would though....but thanks joe.
i would steal it, but it wouldn't mean anything for me to play it, it's like stealing someone else's emotions and someone else's life. i like for my songs to come from me, so they mean something.

MaybeOneDay
07/25/03, 04:44 PM
Originally posted by blaarg
i would steal it, but it wouldn't mean anything for me to play it, it's like stealing someone else's emotions and someone else's life. i like for my songs to come from me, so they mean something.

agreed, i feel the same way.

blaarg
07/25/03, 05:24 PM
Originally posted by The Notion
agreed, i feel the same way.
keen, with that said, i'll probably post alot more lyrics, i will post lyrics until your eyes all bleed and you just wish it would end, some would call it sadistic, some spamming, i call it blaarg.

now that that unnecessary post is out of the way, i'll see if i can find something to post...

MaybeOneDay
07/25/03, 05:27 PM
yay...more blaarg