Attending a Friend's Funeral

[TheFallenScene]

I don't remember if I have posted this song or not? Read and commentary anyways. Thanks.

Attending a Friend's Funeral

An ideal situation to bring him back to life
Your suggestion of taking a knife to his chest
Ways upon ways, this shouldn’t have happened
Now it’s hard to wake up with a struggle of guilt

-Pre chorus-
Is this actual life?
A friend with no final dying wish

(Chorus)
Written the last chapter in his book
“No such thing as a perfect fault”
Something as unforgivable
As attending a friend’s funeral

Always and forever the strain will be there
Not being able to leave the torture
Not be able to leave replaying memories
Pull me from the service of a dying friend

-Pre chorus-
Is this actual life?
A friend with no final dying wish

(Chorus)
Written the last chapter in his book
“No such thing as a perfect fault”
Something as unforgivable
As attending a friend’s funeral

Bring him back from the sketched out eyes
My ears are pierced by the flailing cries
Swarms gather to witness the end
The ending of one last goodbye

-Pre chorus-
Is this actual life?
A friend with no final dying wish

Something as unforgivable, as attending a friend’s funeral (x3)

[MaybeOneDay]

im not too keen on the title, but i like the lyrics alot. good job.

[BuriedAlive]

i liked the song. nothing really needs work. keep it up man

[wadejunkie]

Written the last chapter in his book
“No such thing as a perfect fault”
Something as unforgivable
As attending a friend’s funeral

i dont like the chorus. its good to be vague with words, but i think thats really too vague. "written the last chapter in his book," the line just sounds grammatically awkward, unless you meant "written IN," then it would sound okay.

"something as unforgivable as attending a friend's funeral" what about that? its like the line is missing something important

[tothereflection]

Originally posted by wadejunkie
"something as unforgivable as attending a friend's funeral" what about that? its like the line is missing something important

i agree. i like the chorus though so i'm not sure what needs to be changed...just something about it seems off. and like someone else said, the title could use a change. the line is cool in the chorus..but doesn't work as the title of the song. other than that, keep it up. pretty good stuff.