You Spin on an Axis

[OveriseFan]

Trying something new, because I had to for English class.

Years gone by, spent
Outside a house
Usurping a land you once called your own.

Silently,
Politely,
I can not accept this fate.
No. no. No! NOT NOW! Not. ever/


Open your eyes.
Never say never.

Antioch! Antioch!
Never forfeit your ground or beliefs.


Always telling the truth:
X’s and O’s aren’t honest or noble.
I must have fallen in love in the dark...
Spinning in circles never got you anywhere.

[ArTkY_]

This is far too choppy.

[a speedo model]

I'm not sure about this....

[OveriseFan]

This is far too choppy.

You notice it's an acrostic, yes?

I don't know, I can't write them... haha. I wish I could though. I read a really great acrostic(well, it was great for an acrostic, otherwise it's kind of 'eh') called[and acrosticked?] "She said my dancing was like sex appeal. She wanted more." I wish I came up with that line.

[OveriseFan]

P.S. I love that I got two comments one minute after posting.

[ArTkY_]

You notice it's an acrostic, yes?

I don't know, I can't write them... haha. I wish I could though. I read a really great acrostic(well, it was great for an acrostic, otherwise it's kind of 'eh') called[and acrosticked?] "She said my dancing was like sex appeal. She wanted more." I wish I came up with that line.
Yeah, I just realized I'm an idiot.

It's still meh.

[matt_rawlings]

It doesn't really do anything for me because it doesn't stand out as a particularly structured piece so far as themes or narrative (which would be hard considering its brief nature) and I cannot really relate to it