theres a killer in all of us....

[BuriedAlive]

everyone watches as i hide my face
they look for the emotion in my eyes
its all been dissolve with every cut
piece by piece i watch you suffer
now understanding we share the same pain
with every stab i will more invinsible
no one can stop me
my emotions have perished
my eyes are hollow and insecure
all the love i had disintegrated
the future for you is slim
your gone, like a rose down a stream
the body was never found
the blood was on my hands
the feeling your god cant be touched
on maginfied by the sadistic pleasure
that i get by watching you scream
through the windowless room
not a sound was heard
the blood ran down my hands
as i tasted i knew i was god
and no one can stop me
we are all the same
but i am the killer

[proeuthanasia]

haha whoa....that gave me chills. you said it's not one of the best you've written? i disagree. it might not be as complex as other lyrics you've written, but it's an emotional song and the way you put across its message is amazing. great job. i'm proud of you:D

[BuriedAlive]

wow. i was looking for a total opposite reaction. but thanks for liking it.

[proeuthanasia]

ha no problem. i'd change the 'like a rose down a stream' though. sounds a bit lame. other than that, it's great.

[BuriedAlive]

i kinda liked that part but i will find a way to make it a little more intune with the rest of the lyrics.

[BuriedAlive]

any suggestions or coments?

[TheFallenScene]

I enjoyed most of the song, except the line "no one can stop me" which you used twice. It just seems tacky and there is probably something else you can replace it with.

Otherwise Good Job.

[BuriedAlive]

alright i will think of something then post what i got.

[GREENatarisDAY]

i honestly didnt like it much, the whole song was kinda boring and didnt get my attention. There were a few good lines here and there but other than that it needs work

[BuriedAlive]

ya i know. its hard to write about a killer. its alot harder than what i predicted. i will work on it. and try to make it better.

[bleedperfection]

Good but took alittle to much from Thursday's "I am the Killer" and the killing people thing has been done so much u have to be really creative to pull it off.........................

[BuriedAlive]

ya i know i did change some of it.

"There's a Killer in All of Us
everyone watches as I hide my face
they look for the emotion in my eyes
its all been dissolve with every cut
piece by piece, I watch you suffer
now understanding we share the same pain
with every stab I feel more invinsible
my emotions have perished
my eyes are hollow and insecure
all the love I had, disintegrated
the future for you is fading
your gone, like a rose down a stream
the body was never found
the blood was on my hands
the feeling your god cant be touched
on maginfied by the sadistic pleasure
that I get by watching you scream
through the windowless room
not a sound was heard
the blood ran down my face
as I tasted, I knew I was god

[bleedperfection]

Much better. i like the power idea behind it all

[BuriedAlive]

alright thanks man. im glad the changes helped.

[BuriedAlive]

haha the worst of me.

[popdisaster530]

Originally posted by BuriedAlive
haha the worst of me.

I thought it was pretty good, but whatever..:goofy:

[BuriedAlive]

Originally posted by popdisaster530
I thought it was pretty good, but whatever..:goofy:

well thanks man. its hard for me to appreciate my own writings i guess.

[BuriedAlive]

any suggestions???

[pUnkKid174]

i loved it...i dont think that any of your lyrics have disappointed me at all...thats the kind of stuff that i cant get enough of....
if you want to change something that you think needs to be changed...try it...i thought it didnt need to be changed at all...it's got that darker side that i always write about...so i guess thats why i like it so much...

[BuriedAlive]

i loved it...i dont think that any of your lyrics have disappointed me at all...thats the kind of stuff that i cant get enough of....
if you want to change something that you think needs to be changed...try it...i thought it didnt need to be changed at all...it's got that darker side that i always write about...so i guess thats why i like it so much...
thanks man. ya, this song was alot different than i normally write. so its kinda good to know i could still pull it off.