Whispering Delicate Alibis....

[BuriedAlive]

"Whispering Delicate Alibis" (Thanks Matt)
the moments we shared I took dearly
but now your gone, you've set sail
forgot to raise the anchor, but I helped you
you begin your adventure, glad your gone
the blood has dried, the wounds have healed

(chorus)
im just a lost seed, redirected in the wrong direction
my life is plummeting, free falling without a parachute
the parachute is not needed, I learned to fly
I dissappear in the wind, never to be seen again

no more tears to be shed
as I lay gazing at the stars
knowing theres no one to hold me back
I find a rose, beautiful in its own way

I have to live with the fact
that your not coming back
understanding, not mad at all
you werent one I could trust with my love
I drift down the sea of sorrow
I realize I want you dead
I cant drown, learned to swim

(chorus)
im just a lost seed, redirected in the wrong direction
my life is plummeting, free falling without a parachute
the parachute is not needed, I learned to fly
I dissappear in the wind, never to be seen again

[BuriedAlive]

any suggestions?

[proeuthanasia]

i like it. don't really have any constructive criticism for you this time. i like the message the whole 'i learned to fly' 'i can't drown, i learned to swim' idea sends out to listeners/readers. good job (once again:p )

[BuriedAlive]

ya i wanted to send a positive message out to people. and what better to do it then sending one out the people who just got out of a relationship. i dont normally send out positive messages but i just got out of a bad relationship and so did my friend who asked me to write a song to help her get over the breakup.

[proeuthanasia]

that's great. i can see where it would instill hope into kids just getting out of a relationship. and pretty much every word speaks truth, i can definitely attest to that.

[BuriedAlive]

ya its kinda good to get a good message out for once.

any other suggestions?

[BuriedAlive]

bump

[BuriedAlive]

come on guys the song cant be that good. there has to be some suggestion.

[**michelleV**]

i just got out of a relationship so this song was really helpfull:)

[The Nephilm]

here is a suggestion

STOP WRITING CLICHE LYRICS YOU UNORIGINAL TREND WHORE!!!!

[BuriedAlive]

ok i will try. but everything has been writing. everything has become cliche. should i write about elephants next time? or maybe florida? dude its impossible to write a song without it being called cliche. and do you always sound like an asshole?

[The Nephilm]

Originally posted by BuriedAlive
ok i will try. but everything has been writing. everything has become cliche. should i write about elephants next time? or maybe florida? dude its impossible to write a song without it being called cliche. and do you always sound like an asshole?

do something for me. the next time you 'write' a song, don't use the words "blood" "bleed" "stab" "wounds" etc. etc. etc.

i will cut off my left nut if you get more than one line on the page

[BuriedAlive]

well then your saying dont write a song. you said etc etc meaning every word i use. so should i write a one word song that continues to say asshole over and over again?

[The Nephilm]

Originally posted by BuriedAlive
well then your saying dont write a song. you said etc etc meaning every word i use. so should i write a one word song that continues to say asshole over and over again?

it would be better than anything else you have written

and you know god damn well that isn't what i meant. every 'song' you have posted here has one of those words in it... UNORIGINAL

[BuriedAlive]

another one of my older songs.... any other suggestions?

[BuriedAlive]

liking this song alot still... what about you guys?