The new generation 5

[as_we_learn]

This is a little darker mood to the kid's story
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Start running towards the next alley
with every foot hitting another brick
Pace yourself because your legs are weakening
You're breathing faster than time's ticking

I want to take you away from this morning
The candle in the sky's glowing
behind your conscience hands
Your eyes have rolled under
a crack in the concrete sidewalk

You're cornered against a wall by them again
You only have two eyes
to monitor the actions of kids
with six sets of the same thoughts

I want to take you away from this morning
The candle in the sky's glowing
behind your conscience hands
Your eyes have rolled under
a crack in the concrete sidewalk

A fist thrown at your ribs
You put your trembling arms up for protection
The kid with the black hoodie kicks for your knees
You fall right down to catch yourself with palms on the floor
The kid behind you uses a can
to cause impact in the back of your head
You're unconscious for the time being
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"Woke up to bruises and black eyes"

[villevalo1666]

wow...
that's really really good.

i love it.

so, is this a contiuation to a story?

*i thought so b/c what you say at the top.....

[as_we_learn]

yea the first parts are further down the front page and thank you for reading and your kind words

[CellarGhosts]

I liked this one, man. Good job. It's probably my favorite of your "new generation" pieces so far. That being said, I'd still like to see you change it up a little, bro! haha you know? Maybe give the "new generation" series a rest for now? haha jsut my opinion though.

[as_we_learn]

yea i was thinking of stopping and working with something new. thanks for reading and your kind words means alot. you can see that he got beat down and is going to sleep for now.

[CellarGhosts]

yea i was thinking of stopping and working with something new. thanks for reading and your kind words means alot. you can see that he got beat down and is going to sleep for now.
Sure thing, buddy. I'll be looking forward to something new haha. Should be interesting. But don't totally abandon this series...just give it a little time to ...ummm...sleep?...I dunno haha

[as_we_learn]

Sure thing, buddy. I'll be looking forward to something new haha. Should be interesting. But don't totally abandon this series...just give it a little time to ...ummm...sleep?...I dunno haha
no i won't completely leave the series. im just trying to finish up a couple poems. they are gonna later like tommorow

[lew_1987]

i like this. i particularly like "i want to take you away from this morning" and "behind your conscience hands". i agree though perhaps give this a rest for a little then come back to it and see how develops. definitely worth carrying on in the future though