Tomorrow will be better

[missmatilde]

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This is like my third attempt at writing lyric... so please dont be too mean...
I'd love to know what you guys think ao pleaz comment..
I found this website 2day and it's amazing, it's so nice to have find a place as this...
Matilde

[missmatilde]

pleaz... I'm craving 4 some feedbacks... if it just sucks really bad I wanna know...
I know I'm new here and to writing lyrics, but 2 me they'r 2 more reasons I really need to know ur judgment
Matilde

[iHATEapril]

It's not good, sorry, old themes represented in a stale manner. I could probably search these lyrics on google and get 6,000,000,000 results of modern pop bands. Too cliche, adjust your style.

[missmatilde]

okay.. thanks...:blush:
I'll try something different..

[a speedo model]

Yeah, this isn't anything new. But don't stop writing, continue, it always takes time. You need to learn to distance yourself from obvious rhymes and ideas. It will come with time.

[missmatilde]

thanx much 4 your support... everyone I know would just think as a foolish thing to write lyric so... nice to know there are some people who think differently...

I have a sort of short thing that could be a stanza or something and was wondering if this is just suckingly obvious too, or may be made into something decent...
thanx 4 ur time :-)

I'm tired of you
thinking you know better,
I'm tired of me
thinking you will leave her.
you make no choices, but you'll learn it fast
your cruel illusions just wont last

[iHATEapril]

Not very good, but better.

[lew_1987]

yeah this has been done so many times, but pretty much everyone starts out like this, it took me over a year to be able to write at a decent level. so just keep writing and don't be upset if they don't come out great at first, just take on board what people say and eventually you'll find your own style

[missmatilde]

thanx... I guess little steps... u made my day