Christmas, Oh-Five

[CellarGhosts]

Notes: I have an idea for music to this one, but nothing concrete yet. I'm aiming for this one to be all pretty/soft/bittersweet ala the Pogues' Fairytale of New York. So we'll see how that goes. Until then, thanks for reading, and enjoy. Oh, and it's not done yet. This is all I have so far, but I'll finish it tomorrow. Tell me what you think of it so far. Thanks.
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Christmas, Oh-Five

Well the snow was drifting like confetti from the clouds
And the streets were crowded and cold
And the branches had all shed their leaves to the ground
They crunched beneath my tattered soles
We sat in that room together, singing songs and building future ghosts
Although we didn't know it, we were reaching the end of our rope

In that December, as the sky washed to a blanketing gray
And our skin tingled from the air
We walked side by side each and every day, and as we talked
Felt like I didn't have a care
Your prescense seemed to drive away all the haunting memories
It's ironic how in the end, it's memories of that that're haunting me

[Chours]
We said goodnight and we smiled as we passed
Each time that we both met
Some friends seem to have forgotten
Well I haven't forgotten yet

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[a speedo model]

I like it, again consistent and strong. I think the rut you're now in is writing pieces that are consistently "good" or even "great" but nothing that blows me away. Continue to write, I think pretty soon you will post an amazing piece.

[CellarGhosts]

Thanks. I really appreciate it. I'll keep it up, and hopefully submit something truly great soon enough. So thanks, again.

[In Dolorosa]

I really enjoy that chorus, I could see myself singing along to that in my car, blaring it.

[CellarGhosts]

I really enjoy that chorus, I could see myself singing along to that in my car, blaring it.
Haha, thanks! I like the chorus too. Simple, but cool.

[missmatilde]

I totally love the chorus too...
esp the last line
Matilde

[JustAnotherPoet]

nice. really consistant and a little nostalgic...i like.

[CellarGhosts]

Thanks so much. I like that you found it nostalgic too haha. That was sort of the goal haha