Live At Ground Zero (Please Read and Crit)

[InbetweenVictor]

inside this room chances are so subtle
the fire is fading fast from the lack of oxygen
the air you breathe is wrapped with consequences
all i have is gone burnt to ashes by a dream
Feel the sun its ours take my heart away
to light the sky for you

you built a city on my ruins just to see if i could escape x2

now take these words and empty them inside you and let them fill your lips till the flame finds the end
i take your kiss it stings as it goes down
its cold and sends shivers down my spine
now im paralyzed
conserving my energy to light the sky for you

chorus x2

im listening for footsteps
you'll never come to my door
i'm reasoning with silence
youve never broke it before
but ill still light the sky for you

chorus x 3

[sweeny]

I think that is v cool. way bettter than ours!

[lew_1987]

i'm sorry but i stopped reading as soon as i read "all i have is gone burnt to ashes by a dream". that line is so cliched. this is what it does to people, they just lose interest.

[Hidenothing27]

i'm sorry but i stopped reading as soon as i read "all i have is gone burnt to ashes by a dream". that line is so cliched. this is what it does to people, they just lose interest.


exactly what i thought, i have seen so many variations, get rid of that line