pig hearts and snake eyes

[decisionpending]

alright... i will do this one but don't expect much

pig hearts and snake eyes

unrequited
seems to be
the word of the day
the month, the year
unrequited
seems to be
how love goes
for someone like me
so take these lines
from a scene in a play
on how i want
my life to be led
and change the words
the letters and the phrases
so the boy doesn't
get the girl
in the end

is it meant to be this painful?

the greatest thing in life
is to love (is to love)
to be loved (to be loved)
but...
i guess i'll never
get the chance (the chance)
to be loved (to be loved)
no...

unrequited
seems to be
the word of the day
the month, the year
unrequited
seems to be
how love goes
for someone like me
we are on the stage
with an audience watching
as you jam your hand
into my chest
but the script requires
a brokenhearted man
so there's nothing
but a cavity
there's nothing left

is it meant to be this hurtful?

the greatest thing in life
is to love (is to love)
to be loved (to be loved)
but...
i guess i'll never
get the chance (the chance)
to be loved (to be loved)
no...
the greatest thing in life
is to love (is to love)
to be loved (to be loved)
but...
i guess i'll never
get the chance (the chance)
to be loved (to be loved)
to be...

(unrequited, unrequited)
i guess i'll never, no,
i guess i'll never get the chance
(unrequited, unrequited)
to be...
to be loved

is it meant to be this painful?
is it meant to be this hurtful?
is love meant to be this hurtful?
is life meant to be be this painful?

the greatest thing in life
is to love (is to love)
to be loved (to be loved)
but...
i guess i'll never
get the chance (the chance)
to be loved (to be loved)
no...
the greatest thing in life
is to love

[proeuthanasia]

i like it. it's a different style from what you usually see in here. it's choppy when you read it, but that's great because it just makes the rhythm more evident. when you use the word 'hurtful' though..it sounds a bit corny. but i understand that if it must be used, it must be used.

is it meant to be this painful?
is it meant to be this hurtful?
is love meant to be this hurtful?
is life meant to be be this painful?

...i like the first and last lines but, once again, hurtful just kind of ruins it for me. is there another word you can use? other than that..it's good. i like it a lot. especially the way you use the word unrequited throughout the song to keep it consistent. smart move considering the flow of the song. nicely done.

[decisionpending]

thanx for the positive reply man...
i haven't really polished it off yet, it's on its way so maybe hurtful will go if i find a suitable replacement, but thanx all the same

[TheFallenScene]

It's kinda annoying to read at first. But it's alright.

Keep it up.

[GREENatarisDAY]

your song=cool

[lifelesslove]

being a little bit negative to a song that already owns this room... i love the part where it says change the words, letters and phrases so the boy doesn't get the girl in the end...maybe it's just my type of writing, but I can't understand writing short choppy verses, or not having a scheme...other than that, this is a good song, i think it could work, if you meshed it together a little bit, you could even add more...good job, that's one of my favorite reads so far.....really.

[decisionpending]

yeah, lifelesslove, the reason for the choppy style is because i have a distinct rhythm for the verses (dotted quaver x5 and a quaver = a bar) and the words fit in with that well
also bump! i would appreciate more replies