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takingthursday
08/04/03, 01:26 PM
The Minute Hand Won't Stop Spinning

Staring into the eye of the wall
Where eternity will always stand tall
The precious letdown
Has rolled forward with it's countdown

The week's been taken by storm
And winds have carried off with
Possessions to mark us as the norm

Anchored deep into the backs of minds
The world shuts them out by closing their blinds
And on lines we were told to sign
We hand over our shadows

In empty hospitals with no men in white around
A line in which we must fold our arms and wait
To make a notable attempt at such a claim
All for awhile and for all our time, they we must pay

These wrinkled men in their wrinkled fabric
A wrinkle in time
Leaving a sour bitter taste of lime

Only ones who can claim to be winning
When the minute hand won't stop spinning
And all while the bomb keeps ticking

takingthursday
08/06/03, 01:25 PM
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GREENatarisDAY
08/07/03, 01:15 AM
wow! i really really like that

has a incredibly powerful meaning to it and some great lines in it. you did a good job now go buy yourself a donut

ISuckYoungBlood
08/07/03, 09:25 AM
If your gonig to rhyme I dont think you should use that kind of context that sounds so mature. Most bands that rhyme are pop-punk and thier lyrics arent mature atleast to that degree. Also this line was a tottaly copy of how Thursday rights "In empty hospitals with no men in white around" you have to have a tottaly originality in your lyrics in ym opinion.