Confused (4th New Massage)

[nosdia]

Confused (4th New Massage)

"I'm confused that you never
called me back after the third time"
"You're a failure to me, you never call me you never
said that you never liked me"

the confususion that takes place in you'r apartment,
i know your lying that 'i'm not getting your calls' is a lie
that makes a scar for you to hold on your back for all times,
the scar that you hide behind that smile is only the beginning
of where you lost and i know your not smiling
you said 'God's house is like a building that houses a collection of love'
there is no love beteen us and who are you to think that you know God,

(Chorus)
"The act of having
or showing strong feelings
is confusing not only to you
but to me"

"You're still not returning
my calls, your not saying
one word to me, this is pathetice
that i liked you and that you would do this to me"
i could rip your eyes out before you knew that your life
got flushed out, and you will never know what i'm like,

come on, i had a life before you
came and clamed my life, you have called me six times
in just four days now thats pathetice, it's pathetic that
you think i have the time to talk to you or return you're calls and
yet you call me a failure

"End OF Message"

"Next message........"

[CellarGhosts]

I like what you're going for, but this just didn't really hold my attention. I'd say the strongest part of this was the second stanza. Also, there's some spelling errors in here, such as:

failyor (should be "failure")
fellings (should be "feelings")

That right there is one thing that really turns people off and leads them away from actually taking the time to read your pieces, you know? So work on that, and just overall, take the time to improve. I didn't think this was horrible, but it does show potential. I can tell youre trying.

[nosdia]

well thats very thoughtfulof you, and i will edit that right away.