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CellarGhosts
03/30/07, 02:15 PM
The next in my series of related pieces. I'm trying to incorporate lots of different writing styles into this thing, so this one will be a little bit different haha. Thanks for reading, and enjoy.

the Vagrant (Chapter Two)

Somewhere off a little town north of nowhere,
In a secluded wood, by the side of a dwindling campfire,
Spinning its' ghost stories,
Was a man no one knew...nor did they care to know.

Looking like he had crawled from the very mouth of hell itself,
He looked silently skyward, listening to the symphony
Of crackling embers and bustling crickets surrounding him.
Somewhere not too far away, a stream flowed placidly,
It's soothing stories easing the heart of every savage beast within earshot.

Meanwhile, the man that no one knew wrapped his calloused fingers
Around the neck of an old beat-up Guild, waiting for the inspiration to strike
From Atlanta to Mufreesboro, from Mufreesboro to wherever the hell he was now,
He had walked on aching feet, dragging behind him a miles' worth of regret
His only friend; this ragged old six-string.

Tonight felt different, however...as if just over the horizon, there was home
As if the all-too familiar lullaby of rumbling freight cars and steam engine whistles
Was all to be a thing of the distant past.

Returning his contemplative gaze back to the warmth of that dwindling fire,
He threw on a couple more logs, and looked into the static swirls of orange, yellow, and red
Someday soon, he thought, as if he was speaking to another,
As a Delta melody began to flow from his fingertips
Someday soon...

as_we_learn
03/30/07, 02:24 PM
Man that is a great follow up in the series that you've made. the line I felt was a little awkward was the line where you say "orange, yellow, and red" that is the only thing in that line and piece itself.
Good Job Charlie man.

CellarGhosts
03/30/07, 07:14 PM
Thanks, JR. I appreciate it. Let's just hope I can keep this concept series up hahaha.

as_we_learn
03/30/07, 07:31 PM
no prob Chris man and I bet it will stay up until the end.

CellarGhosts
03/30/07, 07:35 PM
Haha, thanks dude. It's pretty tricky, though.

as_we_learn
03/30/07, 07:41 PM
Yes it is trying to keep the same characters and their stories intertwine. Good luck man

CellarGhosts
03/30/07, 07:46 PM
Yes it is trying to keep the same characters and their stories intertwine. Good luck man
Exactly, haha. That's just the problem. It's tough to keep everything coherent and to the point, while trying to keep all the characters nicely intertwined haha. But I'll work on it. Hopefully it turns out right.

to kill this
03/30/07, 07:50 PM
wow. you have inspiring talent. seriously

CellarGhosts
03/30/07, 07:53 PM
wow. you have inspiring talent. seriously
Haha, wow, thanks. I really, really appreciate it. It's great to know I have "inspiring talent" haha.
Thanks again :)

to kill this
03/30/07, 08:04 PM
oh well that's the last positive comment i leave. :P

CellarGhosts
03/30/07, 08:12 PM
Haha, gotcha.

a speedo model
03/30/07, 08:30 PM
Very good. I'll give it a more in depth critique tomorrow when my brain is working again.

CellarGhosts
03/30/07, 08:32 PM
Haha, thanks Josiah. My brain is pretty tired too right now hahaha.