Useless wishes

[missmatilde]

this is totally just what I came up with, while watching lost 1series with a friend and on medication ;-)
but.. I kinda liked it, it's short, needs to be finished, and even what I wrote is the very first, much unpolished draft... if u think theme and so on sucks, tell me.. I want to know if it's worth going anywhere, and right now I can't force my mind into any useful thinking! ;-)

[missmatilde]

sorry for taggins, I hate them too, but has it's unfunished I thought they made things more clear.
plus I edited, fixining mistakes and adding to the chorus!

[lew_1987]

follows = follow*. i like the idea with the street lights. you're definitely improving with your lyrics, keep going

[missmatilde]

sorry abt that, if u read the following post, u can see I was on medication, and not getting a word righ! thanks 4 your comment and your support, it means much!!

[missmatilde]

I edited! it's finished, still a draft sorta... but, at list I found where I wanted to go with it... please tell me what you think, feeling free to tell me the trash can is where this belongs ;-)
I'd really love you to point out which parts are stronger\weaker so I know what needs work!
Thanks in advance for reading, I'm honestly addicted to this forum! :-)

[CellarGhosts]

The trash can is where this belongs


...nah, I'm kidding, haha. But seriously, this was cool. Nice job.

[missmatilde]

thanks Charlie! ;-)
At first I stopped after belongs, then I reas on and it made my day..!!! :-) I LOVE this place!!!

[missmatilde]

no one else want to make my day? ;-)

[OveriseFan]

Ugh.

You bump your pieces too much. It's annoying.

[Tom Da Bomb]

holy cow. is this the same thing i read this morning? haha this has come a looong way since then. good job adding and editing.

Sometimes I just cant do that with mine, when I do i always feel that I just make it worse. but this was a good one. Not your best, but your getting there. your getting there.

[missmatilde]

thanks Tom! :-) It means a lot!
Oversive fun, I'm sorry for bumping, but most who may have read it in the morning read 'another thing' as I really edited/added much to this. sorry if I annoyed you, I'll be more careful with 'bumping' :-)
Peace?