new song...

[BuriedAlive]

i cant think of an ending but so far this is what i got.


i hate when i have to leave
leave you alone with him
he's abusive and he says he loves you
the makeup cant cover up the bruises,
that he left on you, the scars that he imprinted
its not your fault, understand that
trust me, i will always be there
enjoy life and the friends you have
cause he wants to erase them
i know you tried not to show it
but hes drunk and heartless
if you dont leave he will end up killing you
i tried to break this cycle, end it now
stand up and leave him
i wont let him get near you
just run away, live with me
wont ever have to see him again
no more pain
no more bruises
no more fights
no more crying
no more abuse

[proeuthanasia]

i like it. it's not your best and it isn't complex, but i like your idea. good job. no real criticism..it's just a simple song.

[BuriedAlive]

hey, they do say some of the most simplistic songs are the best songs.

[proeuthanasia]

very true

[ISuckYoungBlood]

the makeup cant cover up the bruises - rip-off thursday

I am not a fan of how you worded this topic... you worded it much like a pop song when in my opinion words like this shouldnt be pop because the meaning is depressing. I feel that this song was very rushed, and no thought was put into it. But the subject is a subject that could have potential

[BuriedAlive]

i already said it wasnt finished i was just posting what i had.