I am Jack's broken Heart

[wishxfulthinker]

The warmth radiates
From the depth of these walls
And love spills the chambers
And flows down the halls

This room is everything
That you represent
This place means everything
I've never felt so content

And bleeding around me
I feel the soul in you beat
I use all that I am
To make this place complete

I feel your burn
You are everything I admire
I am surrounded in passion
I am breathing your fire

This room owns secret
And the depth of your memory
It is the life you live
And all I could ever need

This place is inspiration
The beauty in art
I am resting in your soul
This room is your heart

[proeuthanasia]

i like this piece. it's a bit choppy in parts, but only so much that it adds character, not flaw. nicely done. I love the wording you use in a few of your lines. keep the poetry coming.

[punklet2101]

yeah, you write well

[**michelleV**]

Originally posted by punklet2101
yeah, you write well It's good!

[xforgetdecember]

Awe. I thought that was a really nice piece. Keep up the good work.

[Alk3DCStars71]

awesome work.

[rainbowmafia21]

Thought it was !great! but didnt really get this part:

This room owns secret
And the depth of your memory
It is the life you live
And all I could ever need

But i'm a retard so w/e lol.

[wishxfulthinker]

Originally posted by rainbowmafia21
Thought it was !great! but didnt really get this part:

This room owns secret
And the depth of your memory
It is the life you live
And all I could ever need

But i'm a retard so w/e lol.

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The whole thing (which kinda comes out in the end ) is that the place I am describing is someones heart. Things you hold in your heart; secrets and memories. Your heart is what you live through, and your heart is all I need.

Thanks for the comment though - I like when people question poetry...makes me feel like it's being read.

[OctoberNights]

you do write really well. nice job i like it