The Letter Writer

[GhostMan90]

She spends the night all alone
Inside the prison she calls home
There's nothing to see but the sorrow
Nothing to live for tomorrow
Writing her feelings on paper
Hoping someone comes to save her
One ray of light in the dark
That's ready to rip her apart

Tell it to the letter writer
She is a lover not a fighter
When she's almost ready to give in
He gives her reason to live
Everything is not how it seems
He can only break all her dreams

She wishes she could just leave
To find that space she can breathe
The pen in her hand is a lifeline
That releases the pain of a lifetime
His words are her only friends
A guide through the breaks and the bends
But the letters keep tearing apart
A metaphor shes taken to heart

Tell it to the letter writer
She is a lover not a fighter
When she's almost ready to give in
He gives her reason to live
Everything is not how it seems
He can only break all her dreams

Slowly he takes her life
Without ever realising why
She loses her reason to smile
He's only gone for a while
But she needs his words all the time
She's reached the end of the line

Tell it to the letter writer
She was a lover not a fighter
This time she had to give in
She lost her reason to live
Nothing was ever what it seemed
She lost the love that she dreamed

(It's pretty simple but it only took 5 minutes)

[Sweetness182]

I like it.
Poem not a song though yes?
The rhyming couplets are good but some of the line syllabals are out.
If it only took 5 minutes I'd like to see a second draft.

[xidreamofyou32x]

It is pretty simple, and a lot of the rhyming is cliche (seemed and dreamed, apart and heart, etc.) but I do think you've got something there, keep working on it.

[JimGray]

I disagree with these posts, I thought this was awful and way too long. The rhyming is cliche, and the story itself is quite pointless.