On the corner of a street

[missmatilde]

another attempt at 'social'.. hope you like it... Thanks in advance for reading, I'd really love to know what you guys think and what I should work on. thanks again, love this place! :-)

[Period Piece]

Nice! I really like the 'story' running through it which is so true to life.

I particularly like the lyric:

We’re so good at disguising pain.
There’s so much to fix, so much to change,

Good job!

[missmatilde]

thaks period piece (sorry, but I dnt know your name)

[as_we_learn]

Heres that flow that I've been waiting for haha. This was good, but the whole on the corner sounded familiar. Who cares I still thought this was pretty cool, so keep it up Matilde you're improving.

[missmatilde]

thanks JR, it means so much! :-) if I am inmproving in any way is all thank to this amazing community and the peps like you that always help so much :-)... and once again you made my day...
btw I have music just for the bridge, so no idea abt the rest, and can't think of anything... and latley music has been starting point, so I'm lost... but happy... thanks again for your support ;-)

[as_we_learn]

No prob Matilde haha

[xsxarexsoxscene]

i don't get why some parts rhyme and others don't.

but i liked it overall. great subject. it definitely evoked sadness in me :( no one should be alone in this world, on the street or not.

[missmatilde]

thanx! I tot agree, no one should be left alone!
about the ryme scheme...I don't really feel obliged to always rhyme, and were it rhymes in the first vers, it will rhyme in the second as well, but I like to try new things;-)

[Period Piece]

My name's John! :)

Keep up the good work!

[missmatilde]

thanx John! :-)