The One That Got Away was I

[xsxarexsoxscene]

I spend my days intricately divulging and indulging what could have been
I waste my life and love obsessing and confessing what I could have said
I wonder what I’ve done to deserve this permanent solution of seclusion
I hope that non-believers will be merciful and grant me some confusion

If only because confusion means that there is some hope left in the mix;
I feel that it will sustain the broken heart of a love addict
I am ashamed to admit my selfish endeavors to feign happiness
I concede that my high standards have rendered me hopeless

I’m begging you to teach me how to get away from “me”
Because “I” is a waste of language and a show of conceit
I’m asking on my behalf and yours for you to stay
I can’t be whole until I give part of my heart away.

[as_we_learn]

Good job. The flow to this was pretty good.The last stanza is great. My only complaint is this one line
"If only because confusion means that there is some hope left in the mix;"

[xsxarexsoxscene]

Good job. The flow to this was pretty good.The last stanza is great. My only complaint is this one line
"If only because confusion means that there is some hope left in the mix;"

do you mean because of the flow?

would it sound better if i took out "if only"?

or do you just not like the subject matter in that line?

[as_we_learn]

I didn't really understand that line. It does mess with te flow though, but mostly because I don't really get it.

[xsxarexsoxscene]

I didn't really understand that line. It does mess with te flow though, but mostly because I don't really get it.
ahhh the third line i said that i felt like my seclusion was permanent, and i was hoping for someone to offer new ideas on the subject, even though they were confusing ones. Because if you are confused, you don't know if your situation is permanent or temporary, so there is that hope that it's transient.

Did that help at all? haha.

[as_we_learn]

I get it now, but that If only messes with the flow. Don't it change yet though see what everybody else says.

[xsxarexsoxscene]

I get it now, but that If only messes with the flow. Don't it change yet though see what everybody else says.
alright, thank you very much for the help :) I probably will end up taking out the If only