A symptom of sensibility (I don’t keep my pain within)

[missmatilde]

the forum seems so populated right now... so I'll post this one as well...
I know the title doesn't appear in the song, I'll change it to the second title, if you think it gives nothing to it...
thanks in advance for reading! feel free to be cruel! ;-)

[a speedo model]

Eh, nothing really stood out to me. The imagery and overall concepts seemed trite and have been overdone. Nothing terrible, but nothing very good either.

[Period Piece]

The repeated chorus is the best thing about this song in my opinion, the verses are ok but don't really stand out. As A Speedo Model said, it seems a little overdone.

[missmatilde]

thanx you guys for taking the time... I'm a whimp right now... so I just have to accept writing whiny me, or not write at all :-(... next time I post I'll do it with a song I wrote few day ago, I'll stop annoying you guys with this thngs ;-)

[Period Piece]

It's not annoying at all! All of your things that I've read have been very good, I just think that a little tweaking here and there would make them even better. And don't stop writing!

[matt_rawlings]

Eh, nothing really stood out to me. The imagery and overall concepts seemed trite and have been overdone. Nothing terrible, but nothing very good either.

Agreed

[missmatilde]

thanx for reading Matt

[a speedo model]

Yeah, it's not annoying. Just continue to work on it, we all start somewhere and it always takes it. :-)

[missmatilde]

thanks so much for the support Josiah (did I get it right this time?), it means a lot. :-)