Paint them the image

[missmatilde]

okay, I stepped back from my original purpouse cause I managed to write a song I'm kinda proud of ;-)... but If I shouldn't be tell me please :-)
it's a bit weird becouse it changes who it's speacking to from verse to chorus... hope it works tho..
Thanks in advance for reading!:-)
sorry, it's kind of long :blush:

[Period Piece]

I really like this, the switch of person works really well and it flows. Great job!

[missmatilde]

thank Period Piece!

[drummer1400]

There are some good ideas here but they are unfinished. The grammar is pretty bad at times. There's potential. Keep working at it.

[missmatilde]

Thanks for reading drummer1400. could you point out my grammar mistakes for me? I'd be so thankful.. english actually isn't exactly my first language, so at times I screw it up. sorry...
thanx again! :-)