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[greys1104]

how's this compared to the last ones?Plus please help w/ a title.Couldnt think of anything.Still thanks for reading.


Everything's all fine and dandy...
When he's around.
Life stops for a moment,
Pausing the irony and sorrow.
Like nothing ever will go wrong.

But when he says goodbye
Then, it comes.
Crepping and silently.
The pain sinks its claws in.
Getting a good hold of me.

What am I supposed to do?
I can't slash out, scream.
How do I get rid of it?
When the hawks fly back and forth
Eyeing me suspicoiusly.

I'd spend forever with him
If he'll be my shield
Protecting me from the monster.
I need help,
And more than just a new armor set.

[Period Piece]

I think you need to really work on the flow, I really couldn't grasp how it's meant to go. Other than that, it's not too bad.

For a title, how about "him", seeing as that's what it is about.