Sunglasses for Dark Days

[Mannella]

I've been wasting every day, so I'm going to let you know.
I'm running my hands through my hair,
swaying to the musical spin of another boy's smile.
Well, I wish I could believe every lyric and line.
In fact, I close my door just to grin and pretend.
And every time I see a new smile, I remark inside.
I'll point out every curve and every flaw,
and every time, the same rude conclusion.
Is this more then sexual attraction?
Is this an honest reaction?
'Cause you're dressing for distraction
and girl, you make me believe,
that I'll never find
a girl that comes back to me.
My door closes again,
Little bit of love, swirling just below the ceiling,

[lew_1987]

*your = you're

these are really good, the rhymes work well. good stuff

[Mannella]

Thanks, I appreciate the comment. Edit added.

[CellarGhosts]

Good job. I really enjoyed the flow of this, and like Lew said, the rhymes work really well.

[Period Piece]

Like Lew and Chris said, great working rhymes and nice flow too. I like this piece a lot, keep up the good work!

[missmatilde]

tot agree with what Lew said! :-)

[Mannella]

I've slowed down my writing. I used to write daily, but it seemed like my writing was just becoming anonymous. So I'm aiming for quality now, not repetition. But anyways, love the feedback. Thanks guys.