I'm back, with new poetic skill.

[Tai]

Well...I don't think I'll be remembered here, but I was here, for awhile...I posted some of my poetry, got good reviews, etc...


anyway, I'm going to be posting a poem, and then hopefully seeing if anybody I know is still around (Hey thom!)

The Poetry:


the earth vibrates as
a platinum string
strummed

How sweet it thrums
The earth-guitar
and how sweet the hand
which sings the sound!

But sweeter still
the able will
which guides the hand
twill keep the still
from consuming land.

For more fearsome is silence
than any sound
in pools of quiet
music drowns

And sweet the tones
and the shadowed sounds
of the noiseless whispers
of crumbling ill

but sweeter still
is the sound of song
that defeats the still


And yet sweeter still
is the singers will
the song that bursts
from a hand that tills
or a voice that chills

And silence is empty
it's stomach is spacious
while song is of plenty
and music is gracious




"Silent are the dead

But loud are the rightious

who with throbbing voice

and steady hand

guide the song

and in place of sacred land

the song is home."-Quietus.


"Song And Silence." De Luit.

[Tai]

So, thoughts people?

[USA_Underdog]

That was beautiful, in a Michael Jackson way. Joking, that was really good!

[Tai]

Thanks, it's one of my first real attempts to stick to meter, rhyme, that sort of thing. Usually it's blank or free verse for me, so I'm pretty proud of the outcome of this piece.

[CellarGhosts]

That was beautiful, in a Michael Jackson way. Joking, that was really good!
What's wrong with Michael Jackson? he was one of the greatest pop music artists ever, plus he could sing really well.

anyway, I thought this piece was pretty cool. nothing really stood out to me though.
but keep at it.