another one...

[Alex Djaferis]

cant think of a title yet...plz comment.if you want to that is.


Greet me with a flame at hand
A torch to ignite the pedestals
Yet we still keep our heads up high
Let’s keep racing against the tide

Against all the odds we fight alone
To keep our eyes set to the throne
Hoping for a coup has never seemed so long
I’ll still go at it alone

Delve into my mind you will find nothing but pride
No eagerness no hope to set the score where it belongs
We search for all the meanings that will always make sense to us
We’ve never grasped our roles this well – I bleed humanity

Greet me with a flame at hand
A torch to ignite the pedestals
We still shoot ambitions for the sky
In the dirt is where they should lie

Why cant we all bleed as one?
Not until our pride is gone...
Not until our pride dies
Will we bleed as one

[Alex Djaferis]

bumpity bump. i just read it over myself, theres a few silly errors in it...but whatever. no one commented.

[xforgetdecember]

It's pretty good. The whole rhyming thing seems to take a little away from it, but that may just be me.

"We search for all the meanings that will always make sense to us
We’ve never grasped our roles this well – I bleed humanity."

I really those lines, and I thought I'd say that. Anyway, keep up the good work. It seems to me that you have talent.

[Alex Djaferis]

thanks for the comments

[Alex Djaferis]

bump :)