BRB Im Gonna Go Change

[xAlexisonfirex]

how about a song about cliche songs?==================




so here it is - i wrapped it in shining gold paper with ribbons and bows.
song number 500 about how much your love kills me, you know how it goes.
a one track mind stuck on you is a store thats closed.

you live in every house on my road.
you stand at every stop sign and walk across every crosswalk.
you fall from every tree.
i see your face in everything.

you've built walls around my mind with your smiles.
i think it's about time to break them down.
ill tunnel underneath
and create my own path.
give me a shovel and a flashlight, i'll be on my way.
with a tip of my hat, darling, i am gone. have a good day.

i think it's about time to break down these walls.
not every thought has to be the same.
so lets blow this place to pieces, baby.
with originality.

[DaneTheTrain]

I liked it alot. Is this one of your first pieces, or as it says, your 500th. Becuase its really good. You have a lot of good metaphores and simbalism in there. Which is what i like. Do you have the music written to go along with these. Or are these just freehand lyrics, more like a poem?


so here it is - i wrapped it in shining gold paper with ribbons and bows.
song number 500 about how much your love kills me, you know how it goes.
a one track mind stuck on you is a store thats closed.

The first verse is a little unnecisary, doesnt really fit very well with the rest. And I think it would be a lot stronger song with out. But if its really important to you leave it in there.


give me a shovel and a flashlight, i'll be on my way.
with a tip of my hat, darling, i am gone. have a good day.

I loved this line. Shows emotion...atitude.

[BuriedAlive]

wow alex, your good at ripping off other peoples ideas. (even though i didnt feel like putting any thought into mine.)

[xAlexisonfirex]

Wow, Chris what the fuck are you talking about?

who did i rip off, i'm guessing you since you seem so butthurt.

and if you are goingt o rip me because i wrote a song the same as yours, you are ripping every song you've ever written because its all influenced by something.

by the by, i didn't know you wrote a song like this. good way to justify any criticism by pointing out you didnt put any thought into it too...nice touch.

[DaneTheTrain]

DAMN...the ownage continues!

[wewin]

go away alexisonfire

[xAlexisonfirex]

what have you posted in the past 3 weeks wewin?

oh, nothing?

so you are just a fucking leech who doesnt havbe anythign to contribute to a message board but doesnt have anythign better to do then sit around on it anyways?

ok. fine by me. just stay out of my way cause i don't really like you.

[wewin]

i can, however, say that i haven't posted anything BAD in the past three weeks. It takes time for me to write a song. And that really isn't even the issue, here. It's not about being prolific, it's about being good.

Dude, it's the internet. What are you gonna do? We're just calling each other names and making scary faces, it's not like "stay out of my way" means anything. I know you don't like me. Get over it.

Some other kids posted songs about cliches awhile ago. Buriedalive may've been one of them. It's not your idea.

Write a good song. I don't care if it's a joke song, just write a good one. This song, I mean, it's almost like something that you'd actually write as a serious song. It sounds almost exactly like one of the poppy emo/screamo things that're so played out right now.

Writing songs about how you're GOING to write songs doesn't work. Are you now going to actually follow through and write an original song, as the last stanza says?

Danethetrain: learn to spell. "symbolism", not "simbalism".

[xAlexisonfirex]

stay out of my way, means just stop posting in my threads, ive learned to careless about your opinions.

and if "this is just the internet - no point in name calling" then why do you always start the fight by throwing insults?

this idea has done before, ok. well can you name a couple of ideas that havn't been talked about yet? i'd love to know.

all the general ideas have been written about, we just have to write about them in a different or better way.

you still have yet to come ot the fact to read lyrics for what they are. if this is a emo/screamo/pop punk song as you say you should judge it as that. how does it do as that type of song.

say you are into folk, and someone posts some gothic lyrics...and they would make a good gothic song, and you rip it saying it sucks. thats bias.

take the songs for what they are worth not for them being a played out style.

theres tons of lyrics about the same thing, but that doesnt mean they are the same some are better then others.