cosmic forces

[decisionpending]

i've been working on this for the past couple of days... gimme a comment or something

'cosmic forces'

the ceiling bleeds away into the wall
until the roof is no more
the stars glitter and sparkle
but do not light up a moonless sky
nothing could light up your side of the bed
a black hole in which nothing can escape
light, colour, feelings, hurt
a shooting star, wish for loneliness again

these cosmic forces
that pulled us together
are pushing
are pushing us apart

men are mars and women...
something, whatever, i don't care anymore
i'm sick of these lips pressed against mine
knowing they don't want to be there anymore

these cosmic forces
that pulled us together
are pushing
are pushing us apart
these cosmic forces
that pulled us together
are pushing
are pushing us apart

an orbit around each other
never to feel the surface again
a satellite moving in circles
inertia takes hold and i am stuck
circling and spinning on my axis
cause i can't let go of our destructive love

nothing could light up your side of the bed
a black hole in which nothing can escape
light, colour, feelings, hurt
a shooting star, wish for loneliness again

[xAlexisonfirex]

pretty good dude.

+ you used different symbols/metaphors then the norm.

-2nd verse, not the chorus...men are from mars women are blah blah

[decisionpending]

bump! i would really like some more replies!

[mikeduin620]

very nice. im a fan for sure, sounds like itd be a good song.

[Straws]

Very deep

[decisionpending]

re-written, final version, i like this one better

'cosmic forces'

the ceiling bleeds away into the wall
until the roof is no more
the stars glitter and sparkle
but do not light up a moonless sky
nothing could light up your side of the bed
a black hole in which nothing can escape
light, colour, feelings, hurt
a shooting star, wish for loneliness again

men are mars and women... something
whatever, i don't care anymore
i'm sick of these lips pressed against mine
knowing they don't want to be there anymore

the science of love i'll never understand
yet it affects me everyday
the science of love i'll never understand
yet it's effects i feel all day

men are mars and women... something
whatever, i don't care anymore
i'm sick of these lips pressed against mine
knowing they don't want to be there anymore

an orbit around each other
never to feel the surface again
a satellite moving in circles
inertia takes hold and i am stuck
circling and spinning on my axis
circling and spinning on my axis

an orbit around each other
never to feel the surface again
a satellite moving in circles
inertia takes hold and i am stuck
circling and spinning on my axis
'cause i can't let go

the science of love i'll never understand
yet it affects me everyday
the science of love i'll never understand
yet it's effects i feel all day

an orbit around each other
never to feel the surface again
a satellite moving in circles
inertia takes hold and i am stuck
circling and spinning on my axis
'cause i can't let go

[GREENatarisDAY]

:rolleyes:

i really didnt like this thats all ill say

[xAlexisonfirex]

i retract my opinion.

i dont like it.

[decisionpending]

can i get some reasons on the opinions expressed in the comments? also which version is better... some more lyrics comin soon

[mikeduin620]

i kind of liked the cosmic forces are pulling us together, pushing us apart lines. disappointed you did away with that.