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tearsofhatred92
06/07/07, 10:34 PM
Well, I have a band called "The Unheard Voices" and this is a song that I have written for us... tell me what you think pleez... the music guidlines are there for my band but it helps you get the idea of the song.
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24
(clapping hands, fast)Jump up on the tables
let the words fall from your mouth,
Let them here you deep crys of anger and rage.
Jump up from your chair and send them marching to their grave...
(slows, stop clappiing no music for a second)
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(1st ch.)
Dancing spirtis of revenge
help them slow their feeble mind.
Helping make this clearer heals your body all the time.
So if you feel rejected
Grab your pitch for and your flame.
Set their souls on fire...
their bodies shall not be claimed....
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(music grows fast)
Steal the look in broad daylight.
Tighten them in capsels don't ever let them see the night.
They can smell you coming so don't look back.
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(slows in mystic way)
For when the time shall come
the day will shine and evil will preavel all time...(pauses)
(in evil screaming voice, slow)
So march on por souls
and seek the day when all the good will fade away-
(faster, loud music)
SO BE GONE--- (cuts off quickly)

cris545
06/07/07, 10:50 PM
ehhhh, no, sorry.

and edit that HUGE text before you get killed.

lew_1987
06/08/07, 03:59 AM
yep theres no way you're gonna get a proper opinion before you edit it.

XxIronistxX
06/09/07, 10:14 PM
too big of text and alot of spelling errors