A Weekend Spent Inhaling Paint Thinner

[ArTkY_]

Shooting whimsical ideas off the top of my head
they bounce around the walls like sound waves
I can hear them echoing in my skull
and it's driving me insane.
if I could be more faithful to my own ideals
believe me, I would
but it's just so much simpler to lack,
so much simpler to give up and lie down and wait to die

Fin.

I'm REALLY bored. I just wrote this in the span of 12:31 to 12:33.

[vandalsandquinn]

Mmm paint thinner

[ArTkY_]

It's a terrible title.

[a speedo model]

I like this alot, Tariq.

[iHATEapril]

I like it, it's not a straightforward piece of shit like much of this forum.

[XxIronistxX]

i can actually picture what you're talking about, so thats good. nice work.

[Spewk]

i like it.....

[OveriseFan]

HAHAHAHAAHAHAHAHAHA.































(I haven't read it yet.)

[OveriseFan]

You have two different themes here: One comprises the imagery, the other the theme of the poem.

I don't know, it's all right, but I feel like it's a little unfocused. It's also sort of preechy... for want of a better word. Like you're driving the message down our throats. It's not subtle at all.

Anyway, it's all right. Better than half the crap on this forum, just because it's you Tariq.

[ArTkY_]

You have two different themes here: One comprises the imagery, the other the theme of the poem.

I don't know, it's all right, but I feel like it's a little unfocused. It's also sort of preechy... for want of a better word. Like you're driving the message down our throats. It's not subtle at all.

Anyway, it's all right. Better than half the crap on this forum, just because it's you Tariq.
You're completely right. And I don't plan on improving it, because I don't like it anyways.