to admit is the first step

[to kill this]

I miss your scent pressed against my head
tangled in the pillow case, my most wonderful mistake
What do I owe and what do you know
that keeps you lingering here?

I miss your kiss, pressure against my lips,
just like this, my most wonderful mistake
give it all away so you could take and take
just so i could say

I don't care about him anymore
He took my love, he took my luck
with him out the door
Yeah I don't care
No I won't return his stare,
I won't return his stare.

I miss your laugh against my chest
it bounced off my bones and it was the best
now other boys have laid next to me,
stayed, but not as long their laugh had no melody,
and it couldn't ever measure up to the song
of your sweet, sweet chuckle

I miss your lullabies with the
frays of your jeans tickling at my thighs
whispers hidden in the summer fog
you would tell me it's alright
or at least it is tonight, it is tonight

He took my love, he took my luck
with him out the door
yeah i don't care
no i won't return his stare
I won't return his stare

I miss the way you'd turn and say,
over your shoulder "yeah that's her,
i love her always and forever"
forever's just a lie a story read to kids
before bed at night
mommy turns out the light
so the stars will be your shine

he took my love, he took my luck
with him out the door
yeah i don't care
no i won't return his stare,
i won't return his stare

I don't care, and I'll say it till it's true
"I don't care", shh I swear
it's just so i can talk about you

[lovelove6]

i always like to read heartbreaken lines..

i like the last paragraph, i could relate!!!

[to kill this]

thanks :)

[thegraveyard]

this is good, i like it. how long u been writing?

[to kill this]

well forever, but nothing's been good until maybe last year and this year.

[SLADE775]

I miss your scent pressed against my head
tangled in the pillow case, my most wonderful mistake
What do I owe and what do you know
that keeps you lingering here?

I miss your kiss, pressure against my lips,
just like this, my most wonderful mistake
give it all away so you could take and take
just so i could say

I don't care about him anymore
He took my love, he took my luck
with him out the door
Yeah I don't care
No I won't return his stare,
I won't return his stare.

I miss your laugh against my chest
it bounced off my bones and it was the best
now other boys have laid next to me,
stayed, but not as long their laugh had no melody,
and it couldn't ever measure up to the song
of your sweet, sweet chuckle

I miss your lullabies with the
frays of your jeans tickling at my thighs
whispers hidden in the summer fog
you would tell me it's alright
or at least it is tonight, it is tonight

He took my love, he took my luck
with him out the door
yeah i don't care
no i won't return his stare
I won't return his stare

I miss the way you'd turn and say,
over your shoulder "yeah that's her,
i love her always and forever"
forever's just a lie a story read to kids
before bed at night
mommy turns out the light
so the stars will be your shine

he took my love, he took my luck
with him out the door
yeah i don't care
no i won't return his stare,
i won't return his stare

I don't care, and I'll say it till it's true
"I don't care", shh I swear
it's just so i can talk about you

Everything about this is one giant, ugly, cliche. There is no two ways about it. The topic(s) of your writing are so tawdry and overwrought. You really think you're doing something worthwhile? Honestly? A reevaluation of what you're doing is in order if there's any chance that you think this is quality stuff. I would quote specific lines from this paticular piece of trash but they're all awful, I mean "he took my love, he took my luck bla bla bla bla...." who are trying to kid here?

[SLADE775]

well forever, but nothing's been good until maybe last year and this year.

No, nothing's been good.....ever.

[The Database]

lawlz Slade pwns grrls

[to kill this]

i never said that this particular one was my best work and i don't really care for it. i guess i just put it up here cause it was something to do. but you don't have to be a dick about it. if you don't like it, don't read it. stop acting like a two year old. honestly this is all so ridiculous. if you really acted 22, you wouldn't be picking a fight with a teenager.

[peacelovemusic]

lawlz Slade pwns grrls

Did you lose your fingers in a tragic accident and have the ability to type only with your tongue? I send my sorrow to you in your position.


btw, Slade? Would you stop? I swear it's like you have some personal grudge against her. You keep posting on her threads how much you dislike her lyrics, despite if they are good or not (even though none of them are bad). It's coming to the point where these have become more 'let's flame Slade' threads than 'let's review to kill this's work' threads. So shut the hell up.

[thegraveyard]

Everything about this is one giant, ugly, cliche. There is no two ways about it. The topic(s) of your writing are so tawdry and overwrought. You really think you're doing something worthwhile? Honestly? A reevaluation of what you're doing is in order if there's any chance that you think this is quality stuff. I would quote specific lines from this paticular piece of trash but they're all awful, I mean "he took my love, he took my luck bla bla bla bla...." who are trying to kid here?

ok look if u dont like her work...and u r gonna make fun of everything she has got to say then dont look at her songs. she is actually pretty good and i think that u r gonna suck. just stop being an ass hole. this is wher people come to post there songs. if u dont like them, leave

[The Database]

Did you lose your fingers in a tragic accident and have the ability to type only with your tongue? I send my sorrow to you in your position.


btw, Slade? Would you stop? I swear it's like you have some personal grudge against her. You keep posting on her threads how much you dislike her lyrics, despite if they are good or not (even though none of them are bad). It's coming to the point where these have become more 'let's flame Slade' threads than 'let's review to kill this's work' threads. So shut the hell up.
You obviously do not interpret satire well.

[SLADE775]

Did you lose your fingers in a tragic accident and have the ability to type only with your tongue? I send my sorrow to you in your position.


btw, Slade? Would you stop? I swear it's like you have some personal grudge against her. You keep posting on her threads how much you dislike her lyrics, despite if they are good or not (even though none of them are bad). It's coming to the point where these have become more 'let's flame Slade' threads than 'let's review to kill this's work' threads. So shut the hell up.

Good effort :lol:

[SLADE775]

ok look if u dont like her work...and u r gonna make fun of everything she has got to say then dont look at her songs. she is actually pretty good and i think that u r gonna suck. just stop being an ass hole. this is wher people come to post there songs. if u dont like them, leave

And you, well you are just making a complete ass out of yourself with each and every new post.

[peacelovemusic]

And you, well you are just making a complete ass out of yourself with each and every new post.

You're making us hate you more and more with each and every post. STFU

[SLADE775]

You're making us hate you more and more with each and every post. STFU

Why the fuck would I care if any of you talentless n00bz hated me? In fact, that's the whole idea here hahaha, I'm one of the most well known personalities on this website. Do you know that?.... You however, are a nobody. It's probably the same way in your daily life.

[OveriseFan]

Why the fuck would I care if any of you talentless n00bz hated me? In fact, that's the whole idea here hahaha, I'm one of the most well known personalities on this website. Do you know that?.... You however, are a nobody. It's probably the same way in your daily life.

Slade for president!

[SLADE775]

Slade for president!

Hey, how have you been man? Nice avatar....