You are Glass

[to kill this]

You comb your hair with your fingers
as if to make use of lonely hands
that no one else has held in a long, long time
I could say the same about mine

You clean your skin with your spit
as if to make use of your mouth
cause no one's lips have spun you around
or upside down. it's been the same way
for me here in this lonely town

I'm making up for all the times
I've held my head high,
lying to myself as you stepped over me,
used me, put me right back on the shelf
and now you're here but you don't know
just how much i've grown

You paint your walls a beautiful black
so no one will notice the tracks
just like your heart...
you offered me a place in the corner of your room
where these walls meet, no one will ever know it was me

You hide your chains under your sheets
so I'll stumble across them
and think you're just like me,
a slave to old ways and stale mistakes

I'm making up for all the times
I've held my head high,
lying to myself as you stepped over me,
used me, put me right back on the shelf,
and now you're here but you don't know
just how much i've grown

You roll the dice just one last time
and cross your fingers trembling
even more than mine
I want to believe you
I want to be you
but can't you see you
are just walking in your footprints
how can i let you back,
let you back in?

I'm making up for all the times
I've held my head high,
lying to myself as you stepped over me,
used me, put me right back on the shelf,
and now you're here, but you don't know
just how much I've grown

No, you don't know
and don't tell me what I owe
It's you, it's you, it'll always be you
learning the steps of this dance
so you can put on this show

[SLADE775]

Reading this was one of the worst experiences of my life.

[to kill this]

thanks for your opinion, shit head.

[xsxarexsoxscene]

i really like this. however, you have a lot of technical mistakes, especially in your punctuation. also, in the second line i think you mean "use" instead of "us". overall, good job :)

[to kill this]

thanks. yeah, i didn't get a chance to edit it. i'll get on that now.

[to kill this]

i also suck at punctuation in poetry and songs...so i just took it all out

[OveriseFan]

i also suck at punctuation in poetry and songs...so i just took it all out

NO!

Dammit, use punctuation. I hate reading poetry without it, unless it's intentional. (Which, in your case, it's not, because you had it originally.)

[to kill this]

ugh fine...but no complaints about how much it sucks...deal? haha

[XxIronistxX]

Reading this was one of the worst experiences of my life.


Someone sure is dying to be the Simon of AP song reviews...
What an ass.

As for the song, i think it is alright, (good even) but nothing really jumped out at me as great.

[SLADE775]

You need to gain much more experience before you start posting lyrics on a public website. You have no sense of originality of prose, your ramblings can only be defined as worthless trash that one would expect to hear out of a teeny-bopping myspace-addicted, middle school student, though that may in fact be what you are. my advice is for you to discontine writing lyrics all together, as it's very clear that you are neither talented or skilled at doing it.

[to kill this]

do you write? do you post on here? are you a writer? then fuck you. i know this isn't my best work. i just put it up. go look at my other works and tell me that i'm really that horrible. you're a fucking asshole.

[SLADE775]

do you write? do you post on here? are you a writer? then fuck you. i know this isn't my best work. i just put it up. go look at my other works and tell me that i'm really that horrible. you're a fucking asshole.

I've been writing lyrics for a very long time, there was a point where I was harshly criticized for having shallow, poorly written songs. I reacted just as you have, hopefully as you get older if you do continue to write, you'll look back on things like this and laugh. i know if I were to pull out lyrics I wrote when I was 17 I would laugh. I would cut you more slack, but you have a Jesse and the 1$ bandits avatar so I instantly dislike you.

[to kill this]

brand new is amazing, shut the fuck up noob.

[SLADE775]

brand new is amazing, shut the fuck up noob.

Ahahahahaha I should make a thread about this.

[peacelovemusic]

Ahahahahaha I should make a thread about this.

Ahahahahaha we should make a thread about what a douchbag you are.

[thegraveyard]

Ahahahahaha we should make a thread about what a douchbag you are.
lol. yea but slade, just shut up. you r turning everyone aganist u. and to kill this, just stop replying to his idiotic comments. i think we should just ignore him. forget about what he writes cause we honsetly waste out time just replying to his same excate comment of how horrible everything is. and by the way...this is not so bad...

[ahumananomaly]

You need to gain much more experience before you start posting lyrics on a public website. You have no sense of originality of prose, your ramblings can only be defined as worthless trash that one would expect to hear out of a teeny-bopping myspace-addicted, middle school student, though that may in fact be what you are. my advice is for you to discontine writing lyrics all together, as it's very clear that you are neither talented or skilled at doing it.

Wow kind of harsh, considering that it's only a song. (a good one by the way) That's why you post them, to see what you can fix. In your case, you're making it sound like it's the worst thing on Earth, if you don't like it go on a different forum, or go write a better song. She's only a freakin human, gosh....SO THERE :) lol

[goyoyofosoco]

Reading this was one of the worst experiences of my life.




I feel the exact same way.









About your reply, not the poem itself.

[SLADE775]

I feel the exact same way.









About your reply, not the poem itself.

You really out did yourself here.... this must have taken some talent, you ever think about posting lyrics? You'd fit right in with this kids. You really would.

[OveriseFan]

Slade > All you kids.

You don't even understand... go look at the way this forum used to be, and then you'll realize his insults are nothing.

You're lucky Mark and Trevor don't come in here anymore. They'd tear you apart.

[peacelovemusic]

You really out did yourself here.... this must have taken some talent, you ever think about posting lyrics? You'd fit right in with this kids. You really would.

Could you give us one- just one, I don't think it's be too hard or make your pea-sized brain overheat- valid reason that your being such a fucking dickwad? If you don't like someone's poetry, and I'll say this a thousand times if I have to, you could just tell them that nicely or subtly instead of saying 'Reading this was the worst experience of my life' or something about our 'lack of talent'. Go the hell away, please.

[SLADE775]

Slade > All you kids.

You don't even understand... go look at the way this forum used to be, and then you'll realize his insults are nothing.

You're lucky Mark and Trevor don't come in here anymore. They'd tear you apart.

True. This place used to be much better, all around.

[SLADE775]

Could you give us one- just one, I don't think it's be too hard or make your pea-sized brain overheat- valid reason that your being such a fucking dickwad? If you don't like someone's poetry, and I'll say this a thousand times if I have to, you could just tell them that nicely or subtly instead of saying 'Reading this was the worst experience of my life' or something about our 'lack of talent'. Go the hell away, please.

You have said the same thing now about 10 times. By now I'd think that you'd realize that I will never stop. I've been doing this for over 2 years, hahaha. Every time "To Kill This" or anyone for that matter posts shitty lyrics/poetry in here.... I will tear them apart until they stop making threads. Nothing will change.

[ides of march]

slade wins

[peacelovemusic]

You have said the same thing now about 10 times. By now I'd think that you'd realize that I will never stop. I've been doing this for over 2 years, hahaha. Every time "To Kill This" or anyone for that matter posts shitty lyrics/poetry in here.... I will tear them apart until they stop making threads. Nothing will change.

Great, only 990 more times. Btw, you really need to see a doctor and get some Prozac or a tranquilizer or sedative or something.

[SLADE775]

Great, only 990 more times. Btw, you really need to see a doctor and get some Prozac or a tranquilizer or sedative or something.

Ah.... the obligatory gradeschool insults continue I see.... my advise to you would be for you to practice with those who are at, or around your range. Maybe head over to the music forum and test your luck there. Either way, you're neither accomplishing anything or gaining any sort of ground for your AP personality doing this.

[peacelovemusic]

Ah.... the obligatory gradeschool insults continue I see.... my advise to you would be for you to practice with those who are at, or around your range. Maybe head over to the music forum and test your luck there. Either way, you're neither accomplishing anything or gaining any sort of ground for your AP personality doing this.

Oh, and your gaining ground on your AP personality by telling everyone their poetry sucks?

[OveriseFan]

You should stop arguing, and instead listen to my shitty EP!

[SLADE775]

Oh, and your gaining ground on your AP personality by telling everyone their poetry sucks?

Bitch please, I gained my ground a long time ago... back when you were probably just getting out of your "goth" phase.

[OveriseFan]

Bitch please, I gained my ground a long time ago... back when you were probably just getting out of your "goth" phase.

now she's a tru punx.

[thegraveyard]

look, slade was just telling how he felt in the begining...it just what he thought... u all dont need to attack him for saying how he felt...