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thnksfrthmmrs94
06/12/07, 08:51 PM
this is a poem i wrote it's kinda meh....whatev read it and teel me what you think.


Numb

Why must I be what you want me to be, You want control I want freedom, I always feel so faithless and under continent pressure, I want to be what I want to be, You’re smothering me with your tight squeeze because you’re afraid to loose control, One day all my senses will go numb and you won’t be able to control me, Then what will you do, Just let me be me, I’m so tired of being what you want me to be, Never again you thought would you regret your thirst for control, You thought it was the right decision, Yet to me it wasn’t, Now I’m so numb I can’t feel anything around me, Why did you do this tome, Why did you let your thirst for power take over, Your disappointment in me is all the worse, I’m so tired but yet still I lay awake at night for hours on end, Waiting and waiting for you, I want you to take away the pressure, Encourage me and make my faithlessness disappear, But you’ve waited too long, Without you I went numb, You can’t feel me nor can I hear you, I can almost hear you strained cries trying to keep me alive, To save me from it, But you’re too late can’t you see, I’ve waited for you long enough, Now day after day you sit beside me regretting your crave for power over the week, For ever more you will cry in the dark corners of your mind, Trying to save the bits of me that are left, But alas you still don’t understand, I’m not here and never shall I be again, Numbness is what you and I feel between us, All that once known love and respect…gone, Condemned to a life long pain, Now do you see why, You can’t save me because…I’m dead, Gone from this planet for an eternity, So Now all you see of me is memories.
By: Amanda C.

yoyoninjagirl
06/12/07, 08:52 PM
i cant read it, too small

thnksfrthmmrs94
06/12/07, 08:53 PM
it's fixed now(i think)

thnksfrthmmrs94
06/12/07, 08:58 PM
this is another


Here For You
(Most of this poem is dedicated to Brandy)
Our lips can touch, Again I’m crushed, Now you’ll see what you’ve done to me, Yet then you’ll see how you’ve changed me, So do you really think you’re helping me on this one way street?, You want to know how I’ve had to leave my life behind, Yet still like someone I know you came back to me, Why? I ask but you just ignore me, Because in hell never does the suffering end, Never will the pain subside, But one person will come to my aid and end the suffering I endure, Filling me with joy and happiness, A love deep down that will drive me to stay alive, Though I year to go deep I stay alive…for you, For I have a love for her she does not yet know, Though through time she grows closer to me, I run away from her, Afraid of what others might think, But desire takes over fear, For then I give her a key a key to my heart, One of which she can listen to my inner most secrets, She shall have my soul to sell, Yet she keeps me safe from any who wish to destroy, Though she’s a stranger to some and a vision to none, From yesterday she kept me safe from him safe from torture, Hatred courses through his veins, For badly hurt I am I fight for her, Worthy of glory I am not, Worthy of love I am, But still I push her love away still scared, One day I shall accept it, And today is the day of truth, For I will be true to her, I’ve accepted her love, Forever more we are bound by a love and friendship so strong that it can never be destroyed, For now I Mandy am complete.