chaos

[witheredlullaby]

Chaos in my head,
So much confusion and hurt.
I dont get you anymore,
You told me you love me,
Now you dont say it unless ive said it first,
It doesnt sound like you mean it.
I dont know how you really feel anymore,
I dont know if you still care.

[xforgetdecember]

Your poem's pretty weak. The concept is sincere; keep that if you want. But, really, it's short, boring, and without the something that grabs the reader. You may just want to start over using better words. Throw in some imagery and structure, too. It's what poetry's all about.

I don't mean to be negative, and I think my comments are somewhat constructive. If you really like writing, just keep doing it. Like anything, practicing will only make you better at it.