Calling

[a speedo model]

I feel like I haven't posted a song in ages, so here you go. One I wrote last night.

“Calling”
You can leave and make yourself a place, anywhere else
Comfortable in doses, you will return for brief moments
We will always miss you

And each night as the silhouettes haunt your dreams
Will you hear a better time calling?

Don’t leave whispers under the stairs, you pace everywhere
Constrained by time, any return is a lesson to be forgotten
We always did miss you

And each night as the silhouettes haunt your dreams
Will you hear a better time calling?
Like the future we couldn’t mold
We grew sick of ourselves and all we believed in
Like the loneliness filling us full
We grew sick of ourselves and pretended it got better

Aged wood speaks as we stutter down the hall
Pages were marked as if telling ourselves
Where we’d always hoped to return to

[iHATEapril]

"a lesson to be forgotten"
I think that would be more correct grammatically.


Much, much better than basically everything I've seen posted here in a long time.

[a speedo model]

"a lesson to be forgotten"
I think that would be more correct grammatically.


Much, much better than basically everything I've seen posted here in a long time.
Corrected, thank you. haha, it didn't sound write to be but I didn't pay attention...

Thank you, dude. Good to see you back in here posting. We need you!

[thegraveyard]

nice work....better then a few people i can think of...this one has been the best posted in a while i think

[CellarGhosts]

Really good, man. glad to see you post something new, espically with the decline of quality stuff being submitted here lately haha.

great job.

[a speedo model]

nice work....better then a few people i can think of...this one has been the best posted in a while i think
Thank you very much.
Really good, man. glad to see you post something new, espically with the decline of quality stuff being submitted here lately haha.

great job.
Thanks, Chris. Haha, I know. I felt the need to pep this baby back up, although a few guys have returned and posted good stuff. I think this place may be looking up.

[lew_1987]

whilst this was a little hard to get into (for me), its a good piece. maybe my attention span is zero right now, i'm a bit tired. but i enjoyed this, i'm glad you posted something new.

[a speedo model]

whilst this was a little hard to get into (for me), its a good piece. maybe my attention span is zero right now, i'm a bit tired. but i enjoyed this, i'm glad you posted something new.
I know what you mean, haha. Been there myself. But thanks, man.

[thecurerocks182]

I liked it. It is simple, but a strong effort. However, I think you have done better before, but perhaps that can be contributed to the fact that you wrote it in a night.

[iHATEapril]

haha, in regards to thecure dude, I normally decide I'm going to write something, open up create new thread, and write it. My new one was written completely in that fashion except the first verse which I wrote a few days ago.

[thecurerocks182]

haha, in regards to thecure dude, I normally decide I'm going to write something, open up create new thread, and write it. My new one was written completely in that fashion except the first verse which I wrote a few days ago.
I understand completely. I often employ a stream of consciousness type of writing which was the case with my newest lyrics I wrote, as they were written virtually as I was composing the song. However, I'm somewhat of a perfectionist, which is to say that I must be assertive enough in my piece before I can submit it because it bothers me. To each your own, though.

[as_we_learn]

Man I'm glad to see something from you man, its been a while. I loved this piece, very simple but it was effective. The imagery and flow was very good. Great Job Josiah man.

[cris545]

I won't repeat what everyone has said, so I'll just smile :-) <3

[Balibus]

Very well put-together...
I'm just dissapointed something that flows so well is rather shortttt.
It's great. but...uh...maybe another verse couldn't hurt?

Surprisingly though you've strayed from cliche'. There isn't much I've heard or read before.
So a success in that respects. Overall nice job. Keep working on songs..!

[a speedo model]

I liked it. It is simple, but a strong effort. However, I think you have done better before, but perhaps that can be contributed to the fact that you wrote it in a night.
Thanks, man. Yeah, I agree. Not my best for sure.
Man I'm glad to see something from you man, its been a while. I loved this piece, very simple but it was effective. The imagery and flow was very good. Great Job Josiah man.
Glad you liked, man. Glad to be posting something after so long haha
I won't repeat what everyone has said, so I'll just smile :-) <3
:-)
Very well put-together...
I'm just dissapointed something that flows so well is rather shortttt.
It's great. but...uh...maybe another verse couldn't hurt?

Surprisingly though you've strayed from cliche'. There isn't much I've heard or read before.
So a success in that respects. Overall nice job. Keep working on songs..!
Thank you, haha. I know it's short, but I prefer it that way then dragging. But thank you.

[CellarGhosts]

Thank you very much.

Thanks, Chris. Haha, I know. I felt the need to pep this baby back up, although a few guys have returned and posted good stuff. I think this place may be looking up.
No problem. I agree, it seems like this place will start looking up some more. hopefully haha.

[a speedo model]

No problem. I agree, it seems like this place will start looking up some more. hopefully haha.
Hahaha, yeah we can only hope.