We come to life at night

[xsxarexsoxscene]

we're all just waiting for something
that we know is never coming
but what's life without hope
and never knowing

don't pretend you don't keep one eye open at night
just to see if your dolls come to life

What would these walls say?
Maybe something like "Get on with your life"
We sit here day after day
making plans and not taking chances.

pin-up girl glamorously poisoning her lungs
drowsy eyes wistfully looking away
her mind is gone, like his promises
beauty only lasts for so long
and you're left with not much else.

[leezer]

This was a good piece, I really liked reading it, some really original ideas.

[a speedo model]

I liked this alot. Surprisingly quite original, not an original idea but the imagery and way about it is quite good. Refreshing.

[Stardust Cross]

Haha~
I would totally sing this for a song if you would make the notes for it.
>.<

[xsxarexsoxscene]

I liked this alot. Surprisingly quite original, not an original idea but the imagery and way about it is quite good. Refreshing.
thank you! that means a lot, especially coming from you :)

[xsxarexsoxscene]

Haha~
I would totally sing this for a song if you would make the notes for it.
>.<
I'm working on it... i just have to re-arrange and write some more to it i guess.

[TakingBackDowd]

that was very good. it puts life in perspective, great poem.

but next time please use a more readable font, thats my only complaint.

other than that, awesome poem.

[xsxarexsoxscene]

that was very good. it puts life in perspective, great poem.

but next time please use a more readable font, thats my only complaint.

other than that, awesome poem.
thanks.

haha yea i tend to write my poetry in e-mails to myself haha weird... but I didn't really have a lot of time so i just copied and pasted. I'll change it now though :)

[TakingBackDowd]

haha awesome.

now it gets a 10/10 ;-)

[TK]

ha, you definetly have room to critisize my poem. Nice job, I enjoyed this.

[JessTart[SIS]]

I like this a lot. It was interesting to read and it felt like it had a lot of meaning through out it. Kudossss :D