Halo/Holly

[crivor]

NOTE: This is a song I'm working on for my bands new record. I'm not really looking criticism on it. Just say if you like it or not. Thanks.


I keep wishing
it seems it's all I got
and I know you're missing
all the times that I forgot

And every stranger in the world
has to tell me you're the girl
but way the words formulate
this seems to be our best mistake

Where did we go?
I can't decide which side I'm on
Your twisted words block out the sun
and as midnight goes
I'm taking you home

I can't complain
and I know you want me to
you wish on stars and candy hearts
but I'm not wishing time on you

And it's stranger it seems
It feels like a dream
For me it's a nightmare
and every one has to stare

Where did we go?
I can't decide which side I'm on
Your twisted words block out the sun
and as midnight goes
I'm taking you home

Crawl in bed at 3am
the lights are off
It so hard to win
the blues get dark
life's running thin
your so opaque
let my eyes go dim.

[xsxarexsoxscene]

I don't like it.

[OveriseFan]

I don't like it.

[lew_1987]

some bits were ok, some bits were pretty bad.