The Source And End Is You

[Stardust Cross]

Dwelling in a sea of self-pity, self-conscious
You've lost all your strength
But have enough to give in
Give in to time and it's dark powers around you
Give in to death and it's rich offerings...

I can't see why someone would just give it up
When you feel you've found the answer
Think again, for if something is missing
You've been defeated by greed

Life is often cynical in your search for hope
Don't try to reach for the highest
I know you aren't that strong
Give in to time and it's dark powers around you
Give in to death and it's rich offerings...

I can't see why someone would just give it up
When you feel you've found the answer
Think again, for if something is missing
You've been defeated by greed

Don't you think you have blinded me
By a light, by a source
Of enrichment; "I won't give in"
Give in to time and it's dark powers around you
Give in to death and it's rich offerings...

All you've taken from others
Is taken back from you
Driven to insanity
Keep in mind

The source and end is you

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This was a completely random peom. I guess you can already tell that by the title!
xDDD

So this is new, with a bunch of my feelings passed into it. Feelings that are...I dunno

With love,
Victoria Long

[alilbravetoaste]

it's nice to know im not the only 14 year old kid posting writings into a forum on this site haha
(maybe it's a common thing... i dunno.. i dont look very oftern lol)
i liked this though, good job

[Stardust Cross]

xD
14 FTW! Hehe~
LOL yeah, it is nice, huh?
><

And thanks!

[cris545]

I get the feeling you have no idea what you're talking about, sorry. :shrug:

[as_we_learn]

I get the feeling you have no idea what you're talking about, sorry. :shrug:
I have to agree as well.....

btw you two aren't the only 14 year olds here.........

[Stardust Cross]

I have to agree as well.....

btw you two aren't the only 14 years old here.........

:O
I know verily well what I am talking about.
I just guess it wasn't portrayed very well through words?

Hehe~
Really now?
Well I think I might call that a relief.
xD

[cris545]

:O
I know verily well what I am talking about.
I just guess it wasn't portrayed very well through words?

Hehe~
Really now?
Well I think I might call that a relief.
xD
Mhm.

[alilbravetoaste]

I have to agree as well.....

btw you two aren't the only 14 year olds here.........



dude whatever, we so totally are.
pshhtt

[EasySkankin]

I disagree. I think it's near stark obvious what she is talking about, and she expressed her reflections quite well.

I usually hate poems, but I kind of like this one, and am impressed you're only 14. I'm also extremely grateful you didn't rhyme.

Nice job.

[leezer]

Age influences everything, I'm the first to admit I have a glance at age when I'm reading someones work. I suggest you don't show your age and the comments would be nicer, people are so fickle

[as_we_learn]

dude whatever, we so totally are.
pshhtt
haha no joke man. I'm 14 years old, it's nice to see people my age around here. I don't feel like the little kid of the forum anymore haha.

[Stardust Cross]

Well you all know I'm 14 now, so it really wouldn't mean anything if I tried to hide it, now would it?
><

[as_we_learn]

Well you all know I'm 14 now, so it really wouldn't mean anything if I tried to hide it, now would it?
><
Might as well anyway, just for people that don't come in here often to check some work. Do it everybody knows I'm 14 here and I still hide my age.

[Stardust Cross]

:/
Meh.
I don't mind if I get harsher criticisms based on my age! I can shake it off!
I won't let harsh words bring me down.
You can count on that.

:D

[as_we_learn]

It's cool then, btw whats your name miss?

[Stardust Cross]

Hehe, my name is Victoria.
Or is it Evangeline....?
Haha.
Why do you ask?

[as_we_learn]

Haha idk just thought I should get to know ya hahahaha. My names J.R. I can't wait to see you improve this forum is very helpful. Changed me into a way better writer haha.

[Stardust Cross]

xD
Okay!
Then yeah, my name's Victoria. Call me Vikki. Hehe~

0.o
I'll improve this forum!?
I changed you into a better writer?
...Wow.
I didn't know I put that much influence into someone and something.
^^;

[as_we_learn]

No I meant that this forum will help you improve. My bad for messing that up, but I meant the forum helped me out a lot. I'm sorry for the confusion.

[Stardust Cross]

Oh goodness.
You scared me.
xD

Yeah, I'm going to put up a new poem so...
Look out for that one, kay?
Hehe~

I'll be back!
It's going to be called....
Eh, it's Untitled for now but I'll think of something.
:D