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Evilvillin
08/08/07, 06:22 PM
I wrote all these withing 30 minits after my gf broke up with me after a 9 month relationship...so if they r kinda depressing well, at least you know why....im using these lyrics for my band (screamo,emo,hardcore,heavy metal,rock)

my fave is the last one...tell me what you all think

btw im new to the site, wanted to share my work and get real responces




"Adam And Evil"

Heart Shattered
Tears falling
why did this happen
i loved you, you loved me
you always seem to break my heart
why me, why now, why
I loved you right from the start

One love, one wish
forever you promised
forever i stand
forever you swore
forever didnt last
now you shove me out the door

This blade
my wrist
it is you i missed
now i lay no more in pain
in this coffin
crimson with a blood red stain

three words i utter
Take me back
the pain i feel when its your love i lack
My heart is dead!
my blood runs cold
Take me back

I hit the floor
blood flows more and more
this blade my throat
can anyone save me from this hell
my Heart is Dead!
my blood runs cold
here i lie
your not there and here i die






"Liars Deserve Worse"

You claim you love me
You claim you care
all those lies
and he cries
makes it hard
to keep on living
with the hope he thrives

You say it will be ok
That you know everything
But he knows You know nothing
You lie You Cheat
you make his life complete
he cant live without you but knows he must
ends his life with a fatal thrust

Now he lays
cold,still
now he lays where the pain cant dwell
she is all alone her games dont work
her life is hell
she didnt know what she had
now its gone
takeing him for granted was the worst mistake she made
now he lies the devils slave
she had his heart now she has nothing

guilt and depression fill her mind
she feels alone
its her time
she lied she cheated
he made her life complete
she cant live without him but now she must
ends her life with a fatal thrust

people die but love doesnt
live without eacother they could not
now they slumber
each feeling remorse
see eachother one more time
she loved him he loved her
what he didnt know is that she really did care
now they lay both dead
there heart still beat for eachother
there bodies lay still






"suicide Notes And Red Roses"

You and me for eternity
No more, you shut the door
written in blood i confess
i love you
paper drenched in tears
knowing my worst fears
the lies you fed me
o why do you tease me

playing those games
what were their names
fuck you
im better off dead
numb this pain in my head

Fuck the world
lifes unfair, leave me alone
dont call dont talk
not with me
you were everything
now i have nothing

the mess ive made
the pool of blood
dont add up to what youve done
Fuck the world
You dont know what youve done
dont know what youve got til its gone
Now im gone
whats your next move

playing those games
what were their names
fuck you
im better off dead
numb this pain in my head

My life you ended
when you said we split apart
my heart you have now i have nothing
i beat no more
live no more
why do you take it all
why do i beg for more
i never thought this is how it would end
never thought this is what would happen
why do you take it all
why do i beg for more
never thought this is how it would end






"Never Say Never"

You had me at hello
you left me with i love you
why did you have to go
my life is ruined
my heart is crushed
its you i want
but you i cant have

out of reach
out of sight
my life ends tonight
my heart is torn
my heart is shredded
toward death im headed

out of touch out of reach
there is no looking back no moarning
your so far away
so far from me
i cant live like this
i never got to say
goodbye
i never want to say
goodbye
come back
run to me
theres no coming back
not right now
if its time you need its time you get
remember when we first met
i kissed you you kissed me
ourt love can last eternity

no one said i was perfect
no one said i didnt care
i do care I swear
my life is meaningless without you baby
come back
run to me
i never got to say
goodbye
i never want to say
goodbye

Havent eaten in days
as bad dreams go this is the worst
my lifes in a daze
cant walk cant move
in this coma i sit
writing this song in blood from this slit
red flows form every pore
why did you do this
as it comes out more and more
i lose conciousness and fall
why do i keep coming back
toward you i crawl

the pain i feel adds up to nothing ever before
blood comes out more and more
lieing in a pool of blood
things couldnt get any worse
my life is meaningless

no one said i was perfect
no one said i didnt care
i do care I swear
my life is meaningless without you baby
come back
run to me
i never got to say
goodbye
i never want to say
goodbye

Brandon Allin
08/10/07, 01:58 AM
Terrible, just terrible. Stop writing. We have enough over-dramatic bullshit in music as it is.

wyverna
08/10/07, 05:24 AM
Terrible, just terrible. Stop writing. We have enough over-dramatic bullshit in music as it is.

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