Never Say Never

[Evilvillin]

here is my bands first song that i wrote..even did a guitar-pro bass tab if you want it i will give it to u just PM me


Never Say Never"

You had me at hello
you left me with i love you
why did you have to go
my life is ruined
my heart is crushed
its you i want
but you i cant have

out of reach
out of sight
my life ends tonight
my heart is torn
my heart is shredded
toward death im headed

out of touch out of reach
there is no looking back no moarning
your so far away
so far from me
i cant live like this
i never got to say
goodbye
i never want to say
goodbye
come back
run to me
theres no coming back
not right now
if its time you need its time you get
remember when we first met
i kissed you you kissed me
ourt love can last eternity

no one said i was perfect
no one said i didnt care
i do care I swear
my life is meaningless without you baby
come back
run to me
i never got to say
goodbye
i never want to say
goodbye

Havent eaten in days
as bad dreams go this is the worst
my lifes in a daze
cant walk cant move
in this coma i sit
writing this song in blood from this slit
red flows form every pore
why did you do this
as it comes out more and more
i lose conciousness and fall
why do i keep coming back
toward you i crawl

the pain i feel adds up to nothing ever before
blood comes out more and more
lieing in a pool of blood
things couldnt get any worse
my life is meaningless

no one said i was perfect
no one said i didnt care
i do care I swear
my life is meaningless without you baby
come back
run to me
i never got to say
goodbye
i never want to say
goodbye

[leezer]

I had a read of the start of this piece and glanced over the rest. It seems like you've put a lot of influences in here which isn't a bad this and its come on reasonably ok, nothing really new in there but just take the "baby" away so no one thinks you're an arse. Not bad

[TK]

I have to disagree, I really don't like this at all. I think the suicide thing is overdone in so much poetry, or I guess in this case, songs. Also the rhyming feels forced many times. The things I did like, well, "my heart is threaded, towards death I'm headed" got stuck in my head, and I thought that was catchy. Also, your only 15, so you still have many years to improve. Keep on writing man, keep on getting better.
Also, just note that this is just my honest opinion.

[leezer]

You're right that line you mentioned is good but I don't think something can actually be overdone if its done well

[Evilvillin]

thanx guys and yea this was all influenced by my ex who broke up with me on sunday.