There's No Volcanoes in Tennessee

[OveriseFan]

I know this isn't my best, but it's gonna stay. I like it quite a bit compared to my writing as of late. The asterisk means I'm working on changing that line so it doesn't suck. Thanks for reading dudes.



Write down all your secrets, light a match and watch them burn.
Glowing, golden, red and blue, much too fast for every hue...

I don't want to know what it is you're thinking...
I don't want to know what it is you're thinking...

Wait for me to call your name
Outside your windowpane tonight.
Wait for me to call your name
And if I don't then cry yourself to sleep.
You'll be just fine...


Write down all your secrets, publish it and call it fiction.
Bundle up in blankets on the couch, watching television.*

I don't want to know if you'd call it rapture.
I don't want to know if you'd call it sorrow.

Wait for me to call your name
Outside your windowpane tonight.
Wait for me to call your name
And if I don't then cry yourself to sleep.
I'll be just fine...

She said, "There's no volcanoes in Tennessee."
She said, "There's no more chance for you and me."*
She said, "There's no volcanoes in Tennessee."
"So stop on dreaming..."

Wait for me to call your name
Outside your windowpane tonight.
Wait for me to call your name
And if I don't then scream yourself to sleep.
We'll be just fine...

[as_we_learn]

I liked this a lot James. The flow was good and the imagery as well. I like the chorus a lot and I really wanna hear this song. Good job again man.

[OveriseFan]

I liked this a lot James. The flow was good and the imagery as well. I like the chorus a lot and I really wanna hear this song. Good job again man.

If I get it recorded tonight/tomorrow, then it will be on the AP Members comp.

Otherwise I'll post it just for you guys. (And if you enjoy it I'll move to General.)

Thank you so much for this comment too. It's been so long since I've gotten something positive. Do you have something new that I've missed? I feel like I haven't read your work in a while...

I've been working on this song musically (well, not working, just trying to find a melody that stuck. The chords have been there forever.) for so long... I might try to make this song full band come the school year when I have my drummer [He lives in Philly and goes to some music camp in the summer, so I've only seen him once this summer.] He's honestly one of the most talented musicians I know, and I love playing music with him.

[as_we_learn]

If I get it recorded tonight/tomorrow, then it will be on the AP Members comp.

Otherwise I'll post it just for you guys. (And if you enjoy it I'll move to General.)

Thank you so much for this comment too. It's been so long since I've gotten something positive. Do you have something new that I've missed? I feel like I haven't read your work in a while...
Well then I'm gonna go to my friend's house and download your song and Matt's stuff soon.

As for my work I haven't gotten anything new, I've been having writer's block and stuff that I do write I just feel that its too crappy to post. Last thing I posted was a couple weeks ago and I feel like a bum not contributing anymore work haha.

[OveriseFan]

Well then I'm gonna go to my friend's house and download your song and Matt's stuff soon.

As for my work I haven't gotten anything new, I've been having writer's block and stuff that I do write I just feel that its too crappy to post. Last thing I posted was a couple weeks ago and I feel like a bum not contributing anymore work haha.

Dude, it's been months for me. You'll get something. Just keep reading, is the best advice I can give you. Read everything.

[as_we_learn]

Dude, it's been months for me. You'll get something. Just keep reading, is the best advice I can give you. Read everything.
Thanks James. I've been reading like crazy, even news articles and stuff, but it's just I don't have anything that feels new because I feel like I'm starting to use similar lines I used in my past work. Thanks for the advice though and I can't wait until you get this recorded I'm looking forward to listening to it.

[OveriseFan]

I'm just trying to sort out the melody, because I think it sounds good, but it isn't written the way I think a proper melody should be, and I fear that when I actually hear it all come together it's going to sound off.

Keep your fingers crossed.

[CellarGhosts]

I dunno if you got my reply to the PM you sent me with this in it or not (Im assuming you did), so being that there's not much difference here from what was in the PM, you already know what I think.

[OveriseFan]

I dunno if you got my reply to the PM you sent me with this in it or not (Im assuming you did), so being that there's not much difference here from what was in the PM, you already know what I think.

hah. Yessir, I did.

And thank you.

[CellarGhosts]

no problem

[de la sympathie]

I did like this one, James. Though like I've said before, it isn't good as previous things you've done. ;) I like the structure of this one a lot. Actually, I don't really mind the "television" line too much. It isn't as quality, but it doesn't really stick out like a sore thumb, either. If you want to improve that line, then go for it, but I don't really see a problem leaving it there.

All in all, it was pretty good.

[a speedo model]

This was pretty good, I didn't like a few lines like the first one. It just seems to blunt and predictable...I dunno. But the rest is all solid. Nice work with this, keep at it I think with some tweeking and sweet instrumentation this could be great.

[leezer]

This one is ok, its got a good pop edge to it. A bit of country as well.

[lew_1987]

Write down all your secrets, light a match and watch them burn.

man, please get rid of that line. i hate it. cliche as anything.

the rest, however, i liked a lot. good work.

[vandalsandquinn]

Well duh, of course there are no volcanoes in Tennessee.

Nice work J-dog

[OveriseFan]

I did like this one, James. Though like I've said before, it isn't good as previous things you've done. ;) I like the structure of this one a lot. Actually, I don't really mind the "television" line too much. It isn't as quality, but it doesn't really stick out like a sore thumb, either. If you want to improve that line, then go for it, but I don't really see a problem leaving it there.

All in all, it was pretty good.

Haha, like what? I don't consider most of the lyrics I've written to be very good...

Point out to me some of the ones you mean and I'll go and write music to them. (I used to write lyrics first... and yet they still weren't all that great.)

[as_we_learn]

Hey James man sorry for spamming, but I was wondering if you could check out this new piece I put up. Thanks in advance.

[Shorty1186dd]

i like this one. the bit about curling up on the couch does need some work, but i like where you went with your idea. When you say "Stop on dreaming" the structure seems a little off, but other than that good job.

[airik625]

Interesting. Nice choice on choosing TN.

[andrew4045]

+1 for using the word "hue"

[mattybobviously]

Interesting bump...

[matt_rawlings]

It was alright, but I just think you are far better than this. It seems very basic and quite safe, which while not making it bad or even average...it just doesn't click with me

[ArTkY_]

This is old as hell.

[a speedo model]

Who the fuck is bumping these and why?

[vandalsandquinn]

I got real confused

[OveriseFan]

Fuck all of you.

[OveriseFan]

i like this one. the bit about curling up on the couch does need some work, but i like where you went with your idea. When you say "Stop on dreaming" the structure seems a little off, but other than that good job.

Why? Dear God, Why?

[vandalsandquinn]

Fuck all of you.
hahahahaha oh james.

[de la sympathie]

Flashback.


Who bumped this?

[missmatilde]

Well duh, of course there are no volcanoes in Tennessee.



lol, btw :clap::clap: