Northside Lights

[CellarGhosts]

Northside Lights

I can't connect to these scattering senses.
I'm struggling to make sense of something,
Something fading into the gray suburban sky.
It's far too late, but what remains still elates,
Me into a state of nostalgia.

[chorus]
But the northside lights, are dim tonight,
Srings of golden glowing bulbs are fireflies in flight.
Out above this hushed, littered street.
It seems miles beneath these feet.

Calloused fingers clutch this coat together,
In the accidental light of early morning.
Wandering in ink stains, on a faded journal page.
It's all been blurred, loud but unheard,
In these sprawling winter nights.

[repeat chorus]

[bridge]
Ignite these dull brown eyes in a crest of warming sunlight,
Look at me and smile that same way.
Like we used to, months ago in a safer, honest place.
It's something I never will erase.

[chorus]
The northside lights, are dim tonight,
Srings of golden glowing bulbs are fireflies in flight.
The nights all feel the same, the city casts it's glow.
This is all we will ever know.

[xsxarexsoxscene]

i liked this. "accidental light of early morning" evoked really good imagery.

But i really don't like the "It chills us to the bone" ending. It's too cliche.

[as_we_learn]

There we go yeah!!!!! haha. I liked this a lot and the chorus flow and imagery in it was good. Get those recordings in soon man haha. Loved it man, Great Job Chris.

[CellarGhosts]

i liked this. "accidental light of early morning" evoked really good imagery.

But i really don't like the "It chills us to the bone" ending. It's too cliche.
thank you, Alyssa. :-) Im glad you liked it.
oh, and you're right, that last line does seem pretty cliche. I'll probably change it around soon.

There we go yeah!!!!! haha. I liked this a lot and the chorus flow and imagery in it was good. Get those recordings in soon man haha. Loved it man, Great Job Chris.
haha, thanks JR. glad this one was better.

and those recordings are nearing, I promise haha. I just ordered the mic I need, so once it arrives, I'll be able to record.

[CellarGhosts]

edited this a bit.

[OveriseFan]

Not bad, but a tad bit blunt.

I don't really have anything bad to say about it, except that there's a little too much "this and this and this" and not enough imagery to imply these ideas. You're just stating things, which isn't always a bad thing, it's just overdone here.

However, this is your best piece in a few weeks, and is definately a sign of something good.

[Mannella]

The first chorus is epic. I'm very impressed.

[CellarGhosts]

Not bad, but a tad bit blunt.

I don't really have anything bad to say about it, except that there's a little too much "this and this and this" and not enough imagery to imply these ideas. You're just stating things, which isn't always a bad thing, it's just overdone here.

However, this is your best piece in a few weeks, and is definately a sign of something good.
hmm ok I see what you mean.

thanks though.

The first chorus is epic. I'm very impressed.
thanks man.