Britpop For The Butchers

[Jwalker1988]

Snow follows winter.
I'm an autumn stalker.
I owe a thousand worlds to a thousand girls.

[lew_1987]

what was the point in posting this?

[CellarGhosts]

too short.

[Jwalker1988]

It's just a short poem guys, whatever comes into my head gets written. It takes me 2 seconds to post stuff and I would prefer comments about the content even if they are negative, thanks very much x

[lew_1987]

theres nothing much to comment on, that was my point

[Jwalker1988]

Well length doesn't mean anything, some bands can write a song which is a minute long, or would that class as too short? Whats the point in posting negative stuff anyway? If you don't like it just son't comment on it

[OveriseFan]

Because negative comments typically are more important than positive ones. Negative ones tell you (hopefully) how you can improve as a writer.

Here's something to take away: Yes, we all write little short bits in our spare time, but EXPAND on it. Or at least chain your little ideas into a bigger piece. No one here will be happy with a little three line poem.

You're right, a band can write a song that's a minute long, but they have to say enough or show enough in that minute to make it good. This piece is not good in such a short context, but I absolutely love the last line. The first two kind of suck, but that last line is brilliant. WRITE A FULL PIECE AROUND IT!

[Jwalker1988]

Thanks very much for the encouragement dude

[lew_1987]

Because negative comments typically are more important than positive ones. Negative ones tell you (hopefully) how you can improve as a writer.

Here's something to take away: Yes, we all write little short bits in our spare time, but EXPAND on it. Or at least chain your little ideas into a bigger piece. No one here will be happy with a little three line poem.

You're right, a band can write a song that's a minute long, but they have to say enough or show enough in that minute to make it good. This piece is not good in such a short context, but I absolutely love the last line. The first two kind of suck, but that last line is brilliant. WRITE A FULL PIECE AROUND IT!

i pretty much agree with this.

[roughDiamond.]

i love the last line.

[roughDiamond.]

also, there's a difference between negative comments and constructive criticism. it's just plain rude to post a negative comment with no explanation.

[chaosB4storm]

There is no rule pertaining to the length of a poem (obviously), but a good idea to keep in your head is that a poem should be able to stand on its own as a complete message or story.

This poem in particular, in my opinion, cannot stand on its own as a complete message. It is possible for a long poem to not convey a complete message, but I would suggest you expand on this one to make it complete.

[bluecrunchy]

too long, didn't read.