Fire Escapes

[CellarGhosts]

this may seem like it's about Jess too, but it's not haha. I promise. more so, its about not being able to say something when you really want to, no matter what the case. oh, and it's also partly about boredom, as well as my habit of constantly criticizing myself... oh, and points to the person who catches the thinly-disguised "Ron Burgadny - Anchorman" refrence haha.

Fire Escapes

Swollen lips I press tightly together,
Stop these phantom words from rolling off my tongue.
Minute implosion in this cerebral state*,
Winding like fire escapes.

Burning manuscripts in a dull, dumb fashion.
Lettering engulfed in rippling waves of red.
I'm sifting through the embers, raking in the ashes.
Watching paragraphs dispel into clouded memory.

[chorus]
I'm so self-aware in this midwestern despair,
Gut feelings I can't shut out wash away with the rain,
I'm blinded by the traffic glare.

I'll be nothing here without me,
Stepping slowly out into the crowded streets.
I'm so harsh and haunted amongst this sea of faces,
None of them can relate to this cold retreat.

[repeat chorus]

I am an arsonist beneath these buildings,
Bad breath and bad hair, crooked teeth, oddly shaped feet.
With swollen lips I press together 'till teeth bite through,
I'll be fading out, into a deep blue and red hue.



* - that's "minute" pronounced "my-noot" (meaning "small"), not "minute" as in 60 seconds haha.
just thought I'd make that clear to avoid any possible confusion.

[black rose]

I really liked this, Chris. I loved the last two lines in the first stanza, great stuff.

[CellarGhosts]

thanks Melissa, glad you like it so much. :-)

[hailthewarrior]

i liked it chris.

"an arsonist with oddly shaped feet" lol.

[CellarGhosts]

thanks man

haha, yep.

[xsxarexsoxscene]

i really liked this, especially the last stanza. it amazes me that you are so prolific. seriously if you lived by me we could start a band and i'd sing your lyrics. we'd be famous.

[CellarGhosts]

haha, thanks alot Alyssa. I really appreciate it.

that'd def. be cool, but Im sure my musical tastes might clash a bit with yours, but it'd still be cool haha.

thanks again.

[CellarGhosts]

bump it like its hot

[lostfear]

It's sexy. I want you. All tattooed.

I want you. bad.


OH!

[lostfear]

seriously. the song is cool man. I like the anchorman reference and that whole stanza is just really cool sounding and has awesome flow.

[CellarGhosts]

hahaha, thanks Jake. I tried to keep the song serious, even with that Anchorman refrence in there haha. I guess it worked out then.

thanks again though, glad you liked it.

[de la sympathie]

I liked this. There were a few things I didn't enjoy, but your imagery is good, and it flows well. The subject seems to be a bit worn out - the "cold retreat", the "harsh and haunted," but it's something a lot of people are able to relate to, and so that makes it more palatable. Overall, good work.

[CellarGhosts]

I liked this. There were a few things I didn't enjoy, but your imagery is good, and it flows well. The subject seems to be a bit worn out - the "cold retreat", the "harsh and haunted," but it's something a lot of people are able to relate to, and so that makes it more palatable. Overall, good work.
thanks, I really appreciate it. :-) I understand what you mean though, about certain things seeming "worn out" and all that...but you're right, it's easy to relate to, so I guess it's all good haha.

anyway, thanks again for your feedback.

[disco.tetris]

Damn, this is really really good. I can't even pick out a favourite bit, I love the whole thing!

[ArTkY_]

This owns.

[CellarGhosts]

haha, thanks guys. I really appreciate it.