You made everything else seem secondary

[Alex Djaferis]

comments are welcome.


You Made Everything Else Seem Secondary

Remember that time
That you and I stood side by side
Listening to the music fade
Watching the world pass by unchecked
For everything seemed secondary
When everything seemed right
Truth be told when I say
You lit the flame inside my heart
Had I only known
That you controlled the fire
Pouring on the gasoline
Every time the embers died

From the ashes you came to me
You stood out like a rose
I really thought you could be the one
Until you bared the thorns inside
The deep blue space behind your eyes
They kept me somewhat hypnotized
Until the day I realised
It was just a game
In which every time I threw the dice
The outcome would be the same

Remember that time
That you and I hugged that night?
Listening to the music fade
While the world passed by unchecked
We felt so free
We felt so right
We were each others missing piece
In the puzzles our minds were trying to fight

Why didn’t you take the chance?
Why did you not give it a try?
I would have held your hand
And given you a brilliant dance
Of a life together that would have made
A charm out of you and I

But it’s too late…
I’m sorry it’s just to late

[TheFallenScene]

The song is simple and has the basic theme about a girl, which you did a good job at. The part that stood out the most and my fav. part of the song is the 2nd verse.

"The deep blue space behind your eyes" - That lyric is good and also somewhat original, because it eye color doesn't appear to much in a song. Well it does but like it's different then lyrics about the "bleeding sky" or something.

If you enjoy your form of writing (more basic/simple) I say keep it, it's good dude. *Thumbs up*

[Rufio217]

Remember that time <- i don't know why but it interests me because it makes it more specific rather than just being any where at any time, i'll agree with fallen a good simple song easy to go, flows pretty well, allthough at times it felt like i was reading a poem <-- this would probably chnage when music was put with it though...

[Alex Djaferis]

aye, thanks for readin and commentin guys. yeah it was meant to be a simple one. the person this was for was supposed to read it...so i didnt want to make it to twisted...just straight to the point.

[unsung_zero02]

wow thats a good song

[OctoberNights]

yeah its good....really good

[Alex Djaferis]

thanks :)

[LessThanJade]

yeah gooddd:)

[turtlefootrx]

You lit the flame inside my heart
Had I only known
That you controlled the fire
Pouring on the gasoline
Every time the embers died

man as soon as i read that it just hit close to home. just for some reason i completely related to these lines, due to a incident recently.
in my opinion its really good work. id like to hear the full song.

[Alex Djaferis]

Originally posted by turtlefootrx
You lit the flame inside my heart
Had I only known
That you controlled the fire
Pouring on the gasoline
Every time the embers died

man as soon as i read that it just hit close to home. just for some reason i completely related to these lines, due to a incident recently.
in my opinion its really good work. id like to hear the full song.

hey thanks alot man. im glad you could relate...well it sucks you felt the way i did! but yeah you know what i mean!:)

thanks for commentin ppl.

[.Along4theride.]

to be honest the first two lines of the song made me think twice on reading it or not but after i did i found myself really really impressed with the way everything was flowing together......good job on the lyrics and good job by not using dull words ....

[Alex Djaferis]

^ thank you