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turtlefootrx
09/28/03, 08:03 PM
hey guys, i wrote this the other day during my trip to kentucky to visit my grandparents. any helpful criticizm greatly appreciated...

the leaves change with seasons
they wont be green when i get home
for better or worse i see the tide
and i have everything to hide from you
the climate is much hotter hear
with the heat tensions rise
but this time its different
will these be our last goodbyes?
so many years caused so many tears
but nothing takes away the pain
in the end nothings the same
so much of what i know
i know because of you
some of which i didnt want to
opinions arent the same
so where to put the blame
but next year wouldnt be the same without you
what im trying to say, i cant explain
emotions arent my thing
you treat me like im uninformed
retarded if you will...
i dont kno where im going here
you and your stubbornistic views
i remember when you were superman
you did everything you can
now to see you lying here
supermans dead, im shedding tears

rainbowmafia21
10/01/03, 01:04 PM
i like it, though i'm not sure stubbornistic is a word?

turtlefootrx
10/01/03, 05:59 PM
its supposed to be stubbo r n istic. i think the r and n looked like m. but either way i dont think its a word either, but it sounded right at the time. heh

Alex Djaferis
10/05/03, 07:13 AM
i like it alot. but i dont like the superman thing.

xforgetdecember
10/05/03, 08:16 AM
The Superman part reminds me of an Our Lady Peace song. Ehr.. "Superman's Dead". >.>; So.. yeah. The rest is pretty spiffy, though.