Epic

[chaapurplesmile]

tell me what you think & honestly Like what i could do/change to make it better.
Its just a short little thing i wrote yesterday after having a kinda sorta crappy night.

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I begin

disgusted of the
hypocrisy she claims
not to be a part of

exhasted with the
masks she wears with
the fake smiles, false affection.

consumed by the
overwhelming loneliness she
has knowingly gifted me.

and end

solaced in the
peace He promises me
and the sound of tomorrow.
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[kait.]

i think it's way too common subject matter for a poem. you need to introduce something half-original in order to call it your own. it's just too simple. anyone could have written this.